Please write more clint cheating on Natasha they don't make those king of story's

The storys pretty okay.
I like the plot, but it seems like a whole bunch of filler is getting in the way of your point. I mean, sometimes less is more, ya know?
Steves background is rather cliche, but hes likable. It really gets the reader sympathizing, ya did good.

Sarah, however, is probably where your losing the most reviews. People see your plot summary, think "hey, that looks great!" than read the plot and just hate this girl. Hard to enjoy a book when one of the most reoccuring charactors is so unlikable ya know? The problem is, shes an OC. and a well-written one would be fine, but you cant just give her all this drama, let her act all self-righteous and expect people to like her. People dont mind when you make real charactors self-righteous because the readers already know and love them. Your original charactor just shows up, and is suddenly well-recieved dispite being the meanest person, espiecially in the chapter? No. Just no. If you want to give her drama, make her likable first. Not by stating how other people think shes kind or sweet, but actually proving it in realistic actions without allowing her to steal the show. Also? Lokis just NOW comming in? Its been 14 chapters. Once more, you fill too much space with useless things.
You have a good imagination, and this story has great potential. But i seriously suggest a beta editor, to crop out the useless.
Also? The way you wrote the whole backdrop to Thor not liking Loki? You shoulve made it more mysterious. Or atleast dropped it in, in a cleaner fashion.

I am SO excited about Loki joining the story. I really cannot wait to see how he fits in with the others...:D

Hahaha! I can't wait to read about Loki here!
Awesome story!

I can't believe this doesn't have more reviews. Okay, we'll yeah, I guess I can. This IS very new and I'm glad you update so often :) this fic is awesome and I love how you've played aroun with Steve's character. This is very well written and I like it a lot. I might actually stay on this site for this :) keep up the good work!

I like this story ! Update soon !

Why doesnn't this story have reviews? It's really good and well written. I NEVER write reviews, but I really like this story and I'm curious to see how it plays out. Keep up the good work ;) I also love Pepper in this chapter she seems a bit OOC w/ the messy office but you pulled it through and still made it realistic.