Waver summoned
no Zhuge Liang

It'd be interesting if you expanded on all this.

One thing though...
This is a Shirou that was never in the fire or raised by kiritsugu Emiya. That means that he never learned magic, never learned Structual Grasp and Prjection and Reinforcement, never seen a sword befor, and most importantly never became hollowed out by fire and distorted by belief in ideals. In other words, Shirou doesn't have a Reality Marble.

If you re-write this it would be good to post the name of the new story here.

go for it

Aww... I wanted to see Shiro becoming Gar like archer was several years early without ever meeting him.

You know, snippets are fairly good for a prologue you know. Just get to a certain time in universe with all the snippets, and run a proper story from there.

Are you sure that you need to re-write this? I mean Snippets aren't any good for the main plot but for the Prologue they seem to work.

Well, if you believe that to be the best course of action, then do it. In your defense I would say that you're still early in the story, things don't HAVE TO immediately fall into the plotline. It would in fact be odd. You introduced a number of new characters into the world, so it's absolutely explainable that you take your time and explain just what they did and how their presence may have altered things. Lets face it, with that many magi present, it is virtually impossible for things to follow the plot of ZnT. Too many characters that bring too many changes and influence too many events. I personally saw your first chapter more as a prologue to tell us who was dimensionally stranded and where they ended up, and the second chapter explaining what they have been doing, with the next chapter being the real start of the story. But if you feel that a rewrite would be best for this fic, then you should do it. If you think that it's okay to continue it like this, then that's fine too. It's part of being an author, and as long as you're doing it because YOU feel it to be the best option, and not just decide to change because some people didn't like it, then your choice will always be the correct one.
I'll be curiously watching for your next update, whether that will be a rewrite or the real third chapter. In either case, I wish you good luck with your writing.

While the idea is note worthy, I must admit it will be difficult to write considering the vast amount of characters you plan to incorporate into this. I am not trying to discourage you, all i'm trying to do us warn you that with so many charterers it will be hard to keep track of them all and I've read too many Fanfics whet that has happened.

Good luck then.

I feal that the whole Zelretch thing is overused, you can easily do the Saito triping and forcing Velvet into the portal thing whitout the old man Zelretch as long as you don't bring other characters as you are rewriting.
Yet if you still using a lot of characters in the rewrite as well, I must know why Bazett is not in it? After all she is awesome as hell(plus tiat I have a fetish for women in suits helps)

Yeah, you have a good idea here. The problem is that you're biting off way too many characters to focus properly. Instead of development and story growth, we have a few snippets of what's happening. You're not showing us a story, you're telling us what's happening. That's not good. You're skipping some of the meat of your tale. Certainly, you may find it tedious and uninteresting compared to the greater tale you want to tell. Yet you have to remember that this is the foundation of your story. With a bad foundation, what do you think will happen to the rest of your story when you build on it?

Oh man I can't wait till the next chapter of this awesome fic I'm curious to what Waver's runes are since I'm sure Saito will be the gandalfer(?) also will Waver or Rin be able to summon a servant just wondering I know it's unlikely but would be cool to see someone come back.

The story sounds somewhat interesting, yet I have the fear hat writing so many crossover characters in it will give you too much perspectives to write from.

Personally hoped for Adult Velvet Waver, as his skill with finding hidden talents in people and aiding them in mastering it would truly help Louise, plus Velvet as Lord El-Melloi II has El-Melloi's mystic code, the unstoppable quicksilver doll that believe it is a killer robot from the future, how can one miss such opportunity?

Anyway, I wish you luck, I will catch you on the next installment then XD

You know the plot so far is so good, that you will end up making a lot of people addicted to wanting to read more of this story. Keep it up, no seriously update. Right now. I DEMAND 10 MORE CHAPTERS. ahem sorry about that, anyway good job and good luck.