This was really cute! Thank you for the great read!

AWWWW, i loved the story!

Wow! This has to be the best fan-fiction I ahev read in my whole life (as an avid fan-fiction reader, that is... I wasn't exactly read fan-fiction at 1 year of age... :p)
As for the whole "I don't own Sgt. Frog, but I wish I did!" thing, I wish you did too!

*****/*****

I LOVE THE ENDING, that is so something the guy's would do

Alright, sandwich technique time:

You stick very true to the overall feeling of a Sgt Frog episode. I could honestly see your story being an epilogue to that episode in a Funinmation dub. What you made all the items do was very original, and also very true to the fun, quirky nature of the show.

What you could have improved was the way the entire fan fiction was written (don't get too shocked yet though). It's true, each of your six chapters were long, ranging from 7-10 pages I'm guessing, but the entirely of the length was solely because there were so much dialogue. Every times there's dialogue it takes up an entire line, and before you know it you have lots of pages. The key to a good fan fiction is in the details. When I was reading it, I felt like you were rushing along, worrying more about finishing it then telling the readers a good story.

If you ever went back and revised it, I would suggest adding more paragraphs just describing the scenery, or how a character is feeling, other than giving us a short (but incredibly clever) "blood, violence, death, kill" every time Giroro emotions are in play.

Also, because there is so much dialogue, I can understand you not saying "Giroro said" or "Natsumi said" after each passage, but at points it can get confusing to tell who is speaking.

All that aside, it was very heartwarming and left you on suspense the entire time Giroro was gone. Natsumi's reaction to finally finding out the corporal loved her was spot on. I squee-ed and awed, and my heart dropped when I thought you had turned this into a tragedy.

Nicely done for a short fic.

Your grade? XD (I'm majoring to be a teacher, so I have to give grades) B-

A really cute story. :D I loved it. It was also very well written and had a great story line. Definitely keep on writing!

Cute story. Hard to choose between the two...
Number two seems like a interesting concept.

This was an enjoyable story :) and its not often you find a really good one :D i also like this AU story you've got in the works, sounds like it will be good C: ... Then again im a sucker for stories involving zombies :I but i think the 1st one is a little bit more interesting :D anyfrog, thank you for this awesome fic and i hope you continue doing what you're doing

I can't believe I didn't read this story until last night! It was great, and you're an excellent writer.

3 words. Goku, pan, Giru. From dragon ball gt

Luv the last chapter. And I like the first story.

long

I liked both ideas, although I don't really enjoy lemons... *shudder* creepy... but it sounds like a good story idea! Oh gosh... to choose between the two...? I'd probably choose the second one, but you seem really into the first idea. This isn't any help, but do whatever you choose!

Ne-chi, over and out! ;3

The zombie story sounds cool. I vote for that. Thanked for writing this story though. It was very pleasant.

I vote for story 1, but you already know that probably ;D

Great story. It was beautiful! I really loved it and can't wait to read more from you! It was so cuuuuute...

I'm totally subscribing! Yay! I can't wait...!