Read this after watching season 3 finale, checked publish date and... it would seem that Hasbro stole your story, :P i liked it btw :D

wow dude. this is the longest one shot i read that you have written so far. i love it! i hope i get to read more one shots like this one.

Very impressive, seriously, though you have many errors, the main for myself that really annoyed me is that you kept putting numbers when you just could have easily put words such as the number 6 should be six...it's easier, you know?

Another thing is to make sure the creature's first letter of their name is caplized and a few other spelling and grammer errors, other then that very great job and I'm so glad that you did not make this even a slight Spike/Rarity romance, I despise that pairing, the walk turned bet was a bit rushed but that's fine, I'll be awaiting more of another story that I hope you may create soon also I sensed a slight bit of Spike/Twilight romance was I false in that sense?

This was too funny! I could see the Mane Six trying to do each other's jobs and bucking up royally as an actual episode...have you ever considered a career in screenwriting?

Excellent job!