Harry is too confident in this story, comes off arrogant and narcissistic.

For the persona voice I personally went for an overlay of Gandalf, Aragorn, 11-year-old Harry and Russell Crowe, as if it were bleeding into each other.

I like this, “Wiping out world hunger may cause Nuclear Armageddon.”

Really defile a dead person by making her the villan. Nice.

Sorry a cloud of smoke would not stop those three from seeing through the smoke. You have been stretching what is believable. They have these powers but don’t use them which makes them fucking idiotic. Batman has no powers and was able to completely escape? Bulkshit. Writer is a complete and utter fucking moron. Too many perfect coincidences has turned the whole story to bullshit. Too much left unexplained. Too much of people doing really stupid things for the authors flimsy ass reasons. I tried really hard to push on. I like the relationship between Harry and Kara but just about everything else is so rife with holes and stupidity that it’s complete garbage. So either the end of the story reveals that the fates themselves have been mucking about or everyone in your world is retarded.

Always for the sake of drama does the hero have to turn into a fucking idiot. Kara could have sped through the room to grab it faster than Lana could see. But no. Kryptonian never use the power that would make things easier.

Reading

Fucking. Garbage. How do you misspell and totally MISS entire words in this? Holy fuck.

“Made enough mistakes to fill about seven books”, what a perfect line XD

hmm a little angsty, seemed random lol but funny i guess

Harry's boring. Did you necessarily have to make him rebellious? I clicked on this for a Herald of Death, not an edgy hero. I mean, surely Harry isn't what you envision when you think of grim reapers and priests of Death cults?

Whatever. At the very least I hope you come down hard on Harry with the consequences. And no copping out either! Death told him reality would bounce back if he challenged what was meant to happen and he would open pandora's box by fighting Supermans battles. Make it as dark as what happened to the wizarding world or the god was lying. And I don't think she would so whatever comes he shouldn't be able to fix it. Being unable to put the horror and evil back after it's released is kind of the point of Pandora's Box after all.

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Ugh. Why do I get the feeling none of this happens the way it should?

Sorry about my last couple of reviews. I keep telling myself to not write reviews wile drinking. They were meant to be funny about how I don't care as much for reading about alternant realities. I actually do think its funny that you have Harry's dead mom acting his enemy considering he is the Herold of Death. I am enjoying the story so far though it is on the darker side with everyone from their past being dead.

I am sorry but this tale of Lilly Potter taking everyone down from the grave is just not the kind of tale I care for. As far as I am concerned the only power the dead have over the living is what is granted by the living. While I can appreciate the imagination that went into this story to think that the Herold of deaths greatest adversary is his dead mother that contradicts every single report of who she was while she was alive just gives me to big of a headache. I don't think I can deal with any more of this particular story. FYI even though this review is on the negative side I am of the opinion that any review that you can evoke is a good review.

Alternate realities and time lines and the dead haunting the living. I have a headache. I am sorry but the last few chapters just were a confusing mess. While I have mostly enjoyed the story so far I find stories that suddenly start jumping time lines and realities and the dead just to confusing to enjoy. maybe in the next chapter I can regain my bearings.

You Know if I became deaths herald with everyone I cared about dead and unable to die to Join my loved ones I would do everything in my power to kill death and destroy all of existence. If I had to I would Imperio people into starting nuclear armageddon and cast fyndefire on anything that escaped the holocaust. Why because there would be absolutely no point left for life so I might as well destroy everyone else's in an attempt to finally escape to Death.