Good story! I loved it!

This was a lovely written story. I like how Macintosh has to solve it. Someone said "The wise only speak when they feel something must be said," and it describes what happened here.

As for word choice, you did an outstanding job. You have used the words well for the perspective, and you did an amazing job at refraining from using a word more times than needed, and you found a way to be sure to use more complicated words that weren't incorrectly used and wouldn't confuse the reader.

With sentence fluency, it sounded amazingly natural, but the natural flow also had quite a charm.

Voice sounded just as natural.

This was well done, I give it an A.

Danm straight, Mr. Mac. Danm straight.

Good story! It was very heartwarming. I liked that it was in Big Macintosh's perspective. :D

That was very emotional oneshot me and Biggmomma46 both cryed. Excellent job on this chapter bravo I'm very proud that you wrote something so heartwarming bravisimo.

This was really sweet. Its hard being both a sibling and a adult authorty figure. Lovable story between the Apple sibs...