Great story I really liked it.

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I love this so much its sweet and sexy

Hot

that is one hell of a birthday present.

Wow:-):-):-):-):-)

WOW! Awesomeness D

AWESOME! I LOVED IT! I also liked the pairing! Do you know how good you are at writing? XD XP _

Amazing...full stop.

nice, very very nice

"melting into a pile of sexually aroused goo"
oh please this is such bad writing
this is supposed to be a sexy scene, remember? "sexually aroused goo" sounds ridiculous and overdone.

Excuse me as I tend to my nosebleed...
*ahem* As for your review, I love the concept of this story and I love the rhythm. I am NOT a fluff fan but I enjoyed this. The fluff may have killed a goat, but that goat was sick anyways .
I really enjoyed this very much. It was sexy and fun and nosebleed approved.

so sweet and so hot. ;)
now I understand the hype my friends have been talking about. :)

awwwwwwwwwwwwwww soo cute at the end! 3

this is so f***** awesome dude! I cannot blink while reading this!, its s0 great. genjutsu huh, ... :D