vampire arc is way to long

The cliffhanger! Its too damn powerful

Oh crap, spoke to soon. Definitely out of here. One thing I hate more than anything in fanfiction is when MCs unkowningly blurt out Beautiful... It doesn't happen. Ever. Naruto's interactions with chicks was fine up until that point. He blushed sure, wasn't confident when it came to women, he was always aware of what he was doing though. Know it is a stupid pet peeve but it's mine. Hate it even more when he is injured, arrives through some dimensional portal to another world only for him to say that as a chick stumbles upon him. Like no, your dying. Shouldn't be saying Beautiful or Angel or whatever stupid phrase.

Ah what a rant. Over something so totally pointless too!

Oh god, while the absurd amount of OCs was annoying this was still a great fic. This whole 'Honor Duel' is something straight out of fanfiction hell however lmao. That isn't Natsu, at all.

To think this fic that has such great and well thought out Arcs, even if they revolve around OCs, included trash fanfiction cliches like Honor Duels over females to create conflict. How sad. It's honestly made me want to stop reading. I expected better honestly.

The reason your OCs are killing your story is because it's dragging on way to much. From the introduction of Tatsumaki, which was neccessary for learning Dragon Slayer Magic, all the way to the current Arc through 4 seperate towns.

Bacchus Hometown, filled with OCs, the Town with Mira and Company (The only people from the Fairy Tail group that your readers have seen yet, but is the group we all want to see interaction with more than anyone else.), Hargeon with yet more OCs and Erigor and then on to Crocus were the royal family are situated. We also have Boruto somehow making Naruto his apprentice and more or less forcing him into this mission.

A mission that includes even more OCs. Now, I don't mind OCs in general, your fic however is starting to become over run by them. There hasn't seemed to have been a single chapter yet without a prominent OC. We are over 10 chapters in, this isn't even the last of this Arc. When are you going to get to what everyone wants? Interaction with Fairy Tail?

The only 2 OCs I have become attached to at all are Akira and Jeremiah, I still feel like this has been dragged on far to long though.

This review is probably completely pointless, not sure if your still working on it or not. That is why I think your recieving complaints about OCs though. The story is filled with them.

I know this is old but for a Naruto that killed a Dragon he is unbelievably weak. Regardless of it being an old and weak dragon are you telling me Tatsumaki would be beat by creatures of this level? If not then why is it that Naruto's Roar can somewhat damage his scales but not absolutely demolish weaker magical creatures like Lizardmen? Everytime I see him use his roar it pushes, never cuts. Why is that? Is getting annoying at this point.

zaz, z ZZ

Always hated the Dark Naruto persona or id...

It really, really has been overdone.

Just sayin'

For serious you up and left the story...

Honestly I don't like how Tatsumaki just gave Naruto false hope of returning home. Also I never understood why Naruto would want to return after all the shit he's been through. He basically has a chance at a new life but no he wants to return to a wartorn world.

The f*ck are you doing!?
A naruto x fairytail without fairytail guild!?
Are so impotent that you did what you did!?
You DISGUST ME!
I HOPE YOU DIE IN A TORTUROUS DEATH!
INCOMPETENT IMBACILE!

That's it this chapter really sucks.. Naruto is taking too much shit from everyone and I don't like.. But i really liked previous chapters

Everything after chapter 6 really really sucks... Man I really had high hope for this story... And I am really sorry if you take this wrong way, but your OCs really ruined the story. At least it ruined for me.

Please update its wonderful stories. No other stories like this, its Unique, Refreshing, not Harem, Its Good. I beg you, Update It :)

You've handled the Naruto/Hisui interactions wonderfully, I'm looking forward to the fall out next chapter.

Hope you pick this back up soon!