Although I think a beta would really help you, and it's very disturbing that she's so young (') I've actually really loved your story development :)
Can't wait to read the rest!
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Why would a third year a) let a first year in their compartment, b) escort them to the great hall, c) befriend them and d) kiss them?! It makes no sense at all unless the 11 year old is a whore.

This is just perfect! I love it so much!

Question? i'm starting this from the beginning.
Why would third years let a first year in?

Wow! This is so great, I loved it! Look forward to reading more :') Padfoot3 ;)

Like it, update soon! xx

i love your story

Great

It's a nice story so far, but it's just weird that a third year ( 13 year old ) is kissing a first year (11 year old).

i love it!
can't wait to read more!
keep up the good work!
next chapter plz!

It's a nice plotline but I can't help but think that it's very strange for a first-year, eleven year old to be snogging and playing truth or dare? Or have any curves to show at all? Or even become a death eater when she has learned barely any magic, it just isn't very realistic.

interesting