I really liked this! That episode was really good, and I'm glad you wrote this. After they find Eli dead, Ziva's not in the episode, so I'm glad you had her part of the story.
I also thought Ray was a nice addition here. Would've been interesting to actually see him in the episode.
Great job, I really enjoyed it!

hmm interesting, Ray would be uninteresting twist to the mix if he showed up to be there for her during all this wouldn't he?