I loved it so far, keep it up, need more asap, seems like sekai needs mokoto love, maybe a little 3some with setsuna as well lol

Frankly, if I could ranked this, I would give it 7/10. A bit less on the details side. At least you managed to keep the characters in line. Try to write 1st POV to dig deeper into the character's psyche, please!

Update! Update! I love Setsuna...

Well, this was certainly interesting. Two best friends are now torn apart by their love for the same person. There's only one person with the power to set things right. The only question is, will he take the right actions before it's too late? If he doesn't, then it looks like the story won't be living up to the title.

Personally, I felt this chapter was a bit rushed. Especially near the end. I don't think Setsuna would've believed what Sekai told her right away. She would've confronted Makoto about it before responding the way she did. That's how I feel, anyways.

Also, we haven't seen Kotonoha in a while. I can't only imagine what she's like at this point.

I was kind of hoping that things would work out, but that doesn't seem to be the story you're trying to tell. That's fine. I can only wonder what'll happen next...

Hope to see more!

I find it odd that Makoto was able to resist Kotonoha's seductive advances, but not Sekai's. I guess Sekai was more assertive...and drunk. I was really liking Makoto in the story up till this point, but I guess this was inevitable.

Wow! Chapter 65? You might want to correct that.

i knew he was weak

Better than previous chapters.
Keep going!

Ok. It's normal, but:

1. Makoto calls Setsuna "Kiyoura" and she calls him "Itou". You made them too familiar with each other.

2. "The others in the room didn't notice what had happened" - It's not a room, it's a train! Also, Setsuna is living near Sekai, and don't use Makoto's line.

Other is good. Continiue it, I enjoyed this fic!

I finally got around to read it Derek. And I figured out how to make my name not appear as guest

Yes.

It's very good story but needs improvements

It's a pretty good story if you ask me