I’m so relieved that Lucy isn’t being a bitch bahah I was really bout to click off and then I was like nah that’s too suspicious.

AHHHH SO CUTEEEE

This is pretty good!

did you know you are number 18 on best fairy tail fanfictions?

I love the story but I think Natsu is being an idiot for trusting Ivan and he doesn't have a reason to believe him.

Oh my goodness! I have not read the story yet (I always check the end), but this is already exciting! I'd buy that book from what I've seen of the reviews and the description it would be an amazing crazy rollercoaster of an adventure!

In Soo sorry to say this but...I really did in joy. The beginning of the story but then when you went into nalu section I got a little cheased off I would of really enjoyed it but I can't take the nalu it's makes me burst into flames sorry I just don't like nalu other wise the sorry was an A plus I know this story was posted years ago but I was wondering if you could do a fan fiction of natsu only a slave? I know you probably want get this message but if you. Do please respond and maybe do a fan fiction of natsu only a slave and please no nalu

This was the first story that I really had to sink my time into, and I'm glad I did. It has some shortcomings but overall fantastic story. Took me forever to find it again though lol. Really looking forward to the rewrite (assuming it happens).

too long. way too long. not enough tension to keep me reading quickly through these monster chapters, let alone 61 of them.

Or wonder means "to think", that one IS correct. _

I know I'm leaving a lot of comments, so I apologize if it clutters your inbox or anything. I also want to make sure that it's understood my comments don't come from the desire to hurt or anything like that. I wouldn't take the time to critique if I didn't see potential and value in this story. It's a tribute to your hard work and not a slur.

Recently I'm really enjoying the pacing so this is fun to read! 3

Two more grammar edits:
this first one I've overlooked a few dozen times so far so I feel I've shown admirable restraint. "Wonder" is a state of adverb/adjective. "They looked around in wonder". So far, you've exclusively been using this one when 90% off the time you actually need "wander" with an A. "Wander" is an 'A'ction, a verb. "They wandered around the forest."

Lastly, distraught is also an adjective. Saying "he saw the distraught in her eyes" is like saying "he saw the sad in her eyes". The proper way and would need to be "sadness". Since "distraught-ness" isn't a word, you'd have to change around the sentence structure to keep it in (and it IS a great word so I would keep it).

Thank you again for all the hard work you've put into this story. It truly is a massive work and very good for being unedited!

If the gold/silver/etc monetary system is anything like our own world's history. One gold piece would be more than enough to cover both of their rooms and meal prices. And for flashing that much money around, Jellal is an idiot; men like that wouldn't hesitate to scope him out and take that small fortune off him now that they know about it.

On a subject matter note: I feel as if the lashings and the fallout from that event were really glossed over. Even if he has dragon healing, it would take at least a couple of days for him to move and he should be in pretty terrible pain. Also those kinds of wounds in this kind of medieval era could and did get severely infected very easily in "clean" conditions for the time, let alone in stinky, dark, foul dungeons.

Is it reeeaaaally a typo if it keeps consistently happening?

"Than" is only used for comparisons: ie. better than that; rather this than that. If it helps "A" is in compArison as in thAn.

In this story 'than' seems to be used 98% of the time when you actually need "then", the cause and effect word. "If this THEN that" and so on. The 'E' is for 'E'vent. (ie. Then I got to thinking. Then let's do this. etc.)

I know I said I would try to keep the grammar to a minimum so I apologize if this is annoying. It's just a big one that bothers me and I see it everywhere.

so how did they (Gajeel) get away with all that shouting in the dungeons without being discovered? Are there no other prisoners in that block? Because they would have yelled for the guards on the chance the tip-off would get them a bargaining chip of some sort.