Great chap!

I don’t think you’re using semi-colons right. But I wouldn’t know all that much.

Its me again :) This story was so deep and meaningful and I just loved it! I liked how you made Percy and Jason not get along at first but then Jason admitts to having been intimidated by Percy and its all good from there. Now, all you need to do is write one with Piper and Percy talking ;) Please wrote more! I loved this and facade so much!

Very well done, I was disappointed that Thalia was not referenced at all in the discussion. Thalia and Percy's 'sibling rivalry' would have been a much more canon starting point in the power discussion. Anyway, a job well done, there are very few fics of this friendship, keep up the good work.

Very impressive short story, I rather liked it, don't see much of this family trait much, I like it. You did really well, got a good vocabe to...enjoyable.

oh. my. gods.

this is SO FREAKING AMAZING. he's actually matured enough that i can see him doing this. :)

i love how you have leo tied into the beginning and the ending-love the pyro. partially cuz he reminds me a lot of my brother.

i like how percy and jason have that "yes, no" pointless arguement-they ARE still teens, and i love how you put that in to show it without it getting annoying (and of course, jason was mature and pulled out before it got annoying.)

found a mistake at "sweat son" ("sweaty" son?)

the last line was so powerful to me-"that's what families do." perfect ending. :)

This was so lovely. I like Percy infinitely better than Jason, but they were boht nicely defined and well written here, so yay! xx