That was so intense.. It felt so dark until the last sentence.. We'll done! I really loved the change in energy at the end- the allusion to more..

Excellent story, brilliant writing.

Holy crap that's good...
For those of us too dense to get all of the subtleties, please tell me you are going on with this one.
Or, is there a sequel?
I'm going to go now and look at your profile and hope, and then see.
Good Job!

hi there! i love what you did with this story line between Emma and Jean.

Could you please make a sequel following this story and EXPLORE further the growing emotions/feelings between Emma and Jean and explore the deep and meaningful truth about their new relationship turning into "love" or something like that..hehehe.

I would love to see, Jean and Emma moving their relationship now to another deeper level...we think that Jean and Emma might be the ones that could be "soulmates" since they seemed to be like "twinsouls" or something like that, made for eachother in the heart of the universe or something like that...

Please make a BOOK 2 or SEQUEL story and CONTINUE this...thank you!

Looking forward for more!

Absolutly. Amazing

Damn good work, i also liked your other works just awesome. Please do some more!

I really enjoy this fic, thanks :)

Whoa there! This is amazing! It's wonderfully paced and as close to in-character as you can get. I love the descriptors and Emma's little speech there at the end. It makes a lot of sense with all that went down in the comics. I didn't catch many mistakes, although there was one place where you wrote "rein check" instead of "rain check". Overall, very well done.

Very well done. There really needs to be more Jean/Emma fics on here, and I'm glad I was told about this one :)

Wonderful work! I really enjoyed the first chapter. There was one mistake I picked up: "rein check" ought to be "rain check". The descriptors throughout this story so far are fantastic, and I really love the mood/tone you've got going. I haven't read many (read: 0) fics that are Jean or Emma-centric and I found myself liking the characterizations you've set for the characters. "Emma isn't in love with Jean. The woman had been right: she's never been in love with a single person or cognizant being in her entire life. She refuses, and would resent, the implication." is possibly one of my favorite lines. It's just so... Emma! I also loved the little speeches from chapter one in general because they were just so spot on, and I could imagine that -were this a canon scenario -that would be what was said. Excellent writing -well done. :)

I like it but some more romance and less angst please next time.

How about a Storm and Sage story?

Wow, the dynamic between the two of them is so real and hurts beautifully. I love this so much, hope that you will write more for this pairing.

Simple and sweet in the end. I guess they don't need to say anything. Since their both so similiar that they can tell what each other are feeling.

This may be just me but I feel like Emma is pushing for this so much more than Jean. Like, this is what she wanted to do and she sort of talked/pushed Jean into it. Of course it didn't take much to have Jean compile but it's still something Emma is craving more than Jean.

Man, you've done such a good job with reminding us of Emma's educational/training background and goodness, the pompous tone is jumping off the page hahaha.