PLEASE UPDATE ON THIS STORY SOON PLEASE

I'm amazed, my name is also Vega. My name is Margarette Vega Crystal Storm

PLZ UPDATE!

Ooooooo I hope the baby is a girl

soul bonding story and you let her get raped and impregnated?! thats such a stupid decision and the rapist is even tom!? it was a good start but then you started raping the story thank you really you dont know how much i hate you now! git!

i liked this story but since the rape and impregnation i got totally disgusted at this the mothers a goddamn slut the story could have been saved if you let harry save vega before he got his hands on her but noooo let him rape her must have been funny killing the story would have been nice if you wrote rape in the description really now _

it was good so far but your little rape chapter killed the whole story and voldemort and sex? he would rather sleep with his snake than a women i cant even finish even impregnated? really? thats low _

No being engaged plus I am a griffindor why don't I just tell on my mother and punch her and who she got me engaged to if I don't like them/him.

Hahahahahahahahahahahahahaha! Fuck yourself!

That story was amazing please post more chapters asap

Normally I'm absolutely against flaming. But WHAT THE FUCK! THAT'S UTTER BULLSHIT MAN! I know bad things happen but raped and forcefully impregnated is way to far! And the worst is I truly loved this story. But now I can't even finish it because I can't handle it... Thank you for the incredible story up until this point.
You should put a warning disclaimer about the main character rape for future readers...

Wait, didn't't the books say Ginny was dating somebody named Michal at the time of OotP?

LOL. All the "confessions" sound the same.

You know, it's almost like a curse of the OC; they might have one or two good qualities, but soon they evolve into this Mary Sue that shits gold and pees orphan tears.

Why is that? Is it really so difficult to write an interesting character with depth? Flaws add to the character...when you have this utterly boring and tasteless person who seems so perfect in every way, it disenfranchises the book series. You're shooting yourself in the foot.

Wanna know what I remember most about your characters? Nothing. Absoutely nothing, they have so many 'good' qualities that their overall characteristics become this static cardboard cutout. Okay, we get Vega Malfoy is a Malfoy daughter. We get that she's Harry soulmate and significant other.

So what? What does she bring to the universe at large? What point do you have for introducing her, other than some flimsy half-assed excuse for a character that's quite obviously a glorified self insert? I'm in chapter 13 out of 20, and I STILL see literally no point to having her. You also bash characters instead of making them interesting counterweights...is it really so hard to use your brain and come up with believable rivalries and antagonistic dialogue? Must be, because so far you've just thrown Ginny's character around like she's less than a character. Blaise Zabini...I mean, really? He grabs her and tries to hurt her after being rejected? What, did you eat 18 servings of cliche before formulating your characters?

And I'm not saying this to be mean. I sincerely want to know why you and a billion other authors do this. I've also noticed how you tend to have a "do-no-evil" approach to your character Vega (big surprise..) No matter what instance, no matter how it's presented, Vega is never wrong. Harry's wrong. Draco's wrong. Ginny's wrong. Dumbledore's wrong. Hermione's wrong. Severus is wrong. But perfect Vega? Oh no, never. What's that? She has human characteristics and has room for growth and expansion? Better tweak that and make sure that everyone knows she's the best thing since sliced bread.

What's that? Harry can do the patronus since third year, taught because of his sheer determination to conquer over his greatest fear? Yeah, well, Vega could do it since SECOND year. For NO REASON other than she's perfect. And the thing with Narcissa? What's even the point of that? To have loving Lucius (I couldn't stop laughing...really? A nice Lucius Malfoy?) break up with her and...move in with Severus.

I'm not against gay pairings. I'm really not. WHEN THEY MAKE SENSE. Well, actually, looking at Lucy's luscious locks and the fact that Severus probably has a bundle of sticks up his arse, it makes so much sense. Kudos to you, /s.

But going back to the matter at hand, Vega's only flaw is that her mother abused her because she was born...

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Wow, sounds a lot like Harry's upbringing with the Dursleys. Were you trying to go for the pity route, where she tries to put of a brave front for everyone around her, only to have a tough household where mommy didn't love her? That's what it sounds like.

But yeah, other than the awfully unoriginal characters, pointless plot, weak immersion and hamfisted bashing of characters, you have...something going on.

Obviously I'm not continuing any further, but I want you to keep writing. I want you to get better so there will be a smaller chance of these stories popping up. You had a great idea initially, but quickly buried yourself under many tropes; all of which make your story weaker, instead of making it better. You need to really think about your characters and ask yourself, "where am I going with this?"

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Okay I love your story the characters are awesome the concept is really cool but little mistakes always get to me so just to let you know Hogwarts is a British school and Britain is in Europe and beuxbeatons is French also European anyways I sound like a bitch now so I'll shut up but I love your story I can't wait to see where it goes!