Very cute! A few minor grammar errors, but get a beta-reader and you should be fine! You should write more - it's very interesting and the order of events is done well. Great job!

This was uber hawt!
And you say this is your first fic?!
I think you write very well, and even better than most of the writers I've seen on this site (in my opinion). But I would love to see some other works from you, please continue :)

aweeeeee.. this is the best, hottest and sweetest fic ever... i love it! i hope there's more i really love to read about them especially when they grow up.. XDD pls make a sequel! and thank you soo much for sharing this fic in fanfic... thank you soo much

Mm. That was so hot and beautiful and cute and I just love the two of them so much. Especially the end where Aomine had called him a taxi. Small things like that was just adorable. Tehe.

*sob* This was beautiful and sweet andcute and adorable! Kagamicchi's such a cutie too! XD...
But I like Aominecvhi better! I loved how you continued and ended it!..and I'm almost sad that it's over...
Author-san, you have GOT TO write more AoKise fics! :3

Kyaaaaaaaa! LOVED it! Damn! You're one heck of an amazing story AND amut writer! Uwaaaaaaahhh! I so fuckin damn loved iiiittttt! Oh!fjhfjfhgyfhygfhtfyu omfg I have NO words! Literally! I'm speachless! You've GOTTA write more of M-rated AoKise!

Oh my GAWD! Sssooo Adorable and sexy! AoKise isn't one of my all time favorite pairings but I can really fall in love with them with your writing! So descriptive I almost felt like i was there hahaha! Really amazing job with the story! This is going in my favorites! Keep up the amazing work! :D