Just going to honest here. Firstly in my opinion, what I notice first when I read this fanfic is that Ed is soo out of character in this one. Its like he never was Ed in the first place. Next is to never ever put *name/name* like this. Its for pairing for good sake. Unless you put the parental figure tag in the summary. People going to be very confused and really even i though that the pairing going to tony/ed, then i saw the age gap. Then there is the interaction between tony and luka which seem kind of forced from what I see. The only advice i can give you here is that, if you don't know how to write romance story then don't ever write it in the first place. Just stick with no pairing or maybe do more research first. I only at ch10 and maybe i quick to judge but i really can't see myself to read this one untill the end. All I can say is good luck for you. From what i saw, there are many people who like your story but not me. Your the author of your story so you have power to write what you want to write but as a reader I'm also have the power to read or not to read your story which maybe will have effect on how far your story going to be in the future. Well that all from me.

Can you please minumize the use of time skipping? It just turns off the excitement of reading it since we want to know the interactions between Edward and Tony.

I just binge read all 36 chapters of this story. Great work!

That's not the correct version of General. Ippantekina is "something in general." The "General" you were looking of is 武将 pronounced Bushō. Hope that helps.

You sure do love your idioms huh?

I swear, you need to finish this book or else I'll slap you in the face. For real for real. There's no where you can hide that I can't find you. And. I. Will. Find. You. And. I'll. Force. You. To. Finish. This.

I read through all chapters and gotta say this is one of the best Crossovers I have read. The actions done by the characters where understandable and the happenings always had me on edge. I know you haven't updated this book in some months-years, and will with a high chance never read this, but you did a great job with this!

Whoa... I didn't see that coming Pleeeeeeeaaaaassssssseeee update

Plz update this story its data really good part, I want to see how it ends.

Ron doesn't belong in the hour of Apprentice at all but you've STUCK him and that whore/bitch hoermone in there just for canon.

Where's LUNA in all this? You have her sorted with Edward and Harry but you ONLY concentrate on that knowitallwhorebitch that is heormeon!

You REALLY should NOT stick the names as such together at the top..It's misleading..I thought those were pairings but the age difference had me thinking otherwise.

Oh this is great! At first I was sceptical of how you would be able to get 3 separate worlds to somehow join together but this is great! Adding Shambala to the end of FMA canon and the way you snuck Harry into the narrative, it was seamless!

I have an idea you could refer to look as them.

Pleeeeeeeaaaaaaaasssseee finish this book! It is seriously one of the best things I have ever read! It always keeps me one the edge of my seat to the point it is fustrating! (In a good way) this fanfiction is better than most actual books I have ever read! It’s so great for so many reasons like the creative mix of all the shows/movies and the great grammar and the characteristics of each and every character! It’s awesome how you put your own creative twist on all of the things to the personalities to the character realatiomship! I don’t know if you are seeing this but I want you to know that this is at least my seventh time re-reading this and it’s always been good! If you do see this then you can count on me to read every chapter soon to come! If you do not want to continue this book then that’s fine but I want to encourage you to keep writing and do what you love!
Thanks again for makeing this masterpiece of a book and I will always stay loyal to you!
~Sphinx
P.S. I ship Harry and Edward, and they. Are my otp! If you Male this cannon in this fanfiction I will love you forever! ️ !