Love 5 yo HP upset about his Mione

I liked your story but the ending was abrupt.

THAT WAS AWESOME. Sorry for shouting but I felt it was the only way to actually express exactly how I felt after reading this. Thank you so much for writing it.

constructive criticism you need to work on your spelling and punctuation and veritaserum is not two words it's one word

now you're starting to make me feel sorry for the Death Eaters!

old man that would be so humiliating being defeated full grown adults being defeated by 5 year old kids oh my God that would be so humiliating well done

you need to come by and a lot of these chapters together to make them longer

It is good bit short charters but okay. The whole Wesley thing not gonna dat a thing about so stupid. No what really was unnecessary was the troll incident! Come on.. dumbles and voldy was not there, the now spells way above 7th years and fights death eathers. Got friends and harry, i dont believe for a moment she would go crying someplace alone, bad ass hermione would set all these haters in there place or harry.

I always wondered how the dementors were controlled!

This is a great story. There are abundant misspellings, but there are people with reading disabilities, and people whose first language isn’t English. Besides with my eyesight, I’m having Siri read it to me. I tutor foreigners to read English and I have dyscalcula myself, so, really, whatever it takes to tell a fantastic story, right?!
Rock on

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I have given up on your story because it's too confusing to paragraph structure is wrong. Each time a character speaks, your supposed to start a new paragraph.

Interesting start to your story. You are making one glaring error. Harry's mother's name is Lily! There is no excuse for spelling characters mentioned in Harry Potter books wrong!

Ron asked them. "Wheres Potters bed?

How can Ron ask where Potters bed is? Weasley is a Slytherin, the Rest of the Potter Crew is in Gryffindor. He may be able to visit the Silings in the Common Room, but no way would they allow him in the bedroom.