update soon :)

Again, as I mentioned in the previous review, punctuation is really important! This include grammar, spelling, and of course, punctuation. It could be the tipping point if someone is deciding whether or not they want to read your story. Of course, I also mentioned I really love the content and style of these letters. The same applies for this one!

Okay, so back to SPaG. "mother" needs to be capitalized, right at the beginning. And don't forget to use a comma after the "Dear mother" either, because that's proper letter formatting. "It was like 2000 years ago," Here, Persephone is talking way too informally. Considering the Gods have been around for awhile, they don't really use slang like the word, 'like'. I suggest something like, "Two Millenium" instead of using the actual number, in trying to mimic their way of speech.

"I even tried to get hades to eat cereal sometimes he never does." Capitalize 'hades'. After 'sometimes', put either a semicolon (;) or a comma and then 'but'.

"I have a garden here its beautiful mom you should see it if Hades lets you come." After 'garden', put a comma and then an 'and' to connect the sentence. Capitalize 'mom'.

"And for the 1999th time" "See you in 2 months." Don't use the actual number. Type the number out. In any type of writing, we try to avoid that because it does look right, and it's make the story look sloppy.

And that's it for the SPaG. Again, love the last line (how do you come up with them?)

Short, and sweet :) I like how you have them talking about inconsequential things like cereal, and how Demeter is scolding Persephone.

You made a couple spelling errors. One was at, "Cereals", you accidently put an 's' there. Also, at "but nooo you had to eat that". I realize that you're trying to emphasize the 'no', but there are better ways to do that such as italics or something else. In addition, there were a lot of punctuation errors in your letter. For example, "Dear you really should not", you need a comma between 'dear' and 'you'. Another example would be "Cereals is good but nooo you had to eat the pomegranate." You need a comma between 'nooo' and 'you'.

Other than that, I really liked the content in the story!

Nice story "Lizzie" i liked it, keep writing all you stories i love them