Beautiful story. Love Gaasaku.

Ohh love it keep it up

So sweet for an ending. Love it

Tsunade is the 5th hokage Naruto would be the 6th hokage! Srry but i thought you should know you wrote that he would become the 5th hokage.

Awe cute ending!

Please write what the Japanese words say, I know some meanings but not all that u write in here. Love the story by the way!

Your plot is interesting and your grammar practically flawless, a true rarity for this site, but you need to pick a language and stick with it. When you randomly throw in those japanese words, often without context you can't expect the readers to know what they are supposed to mean. It i irritating and the reason that I am stopping at this point. You started doing it more and more often as the chapter progressed. I advise sticking entirely to one language in the future, but if you absolutely must use a second have a translation present. This translation could be in brackets right after or in a note down at the bottom. Another alternative would be to say they are speaking in ...blank...language and then always have that language in italics. There are alternatives to what you are doing and to be honest the insertion of the foreign words i the only reason i am no longer reading. The rest of your writing is far above par, especially for the internet and this site in particular.

When I saw the number of reviews it worried me to read this, but now that I have I just don't get it. Four reviews? That just isn't right. That's why I'm making it five! Almost tempted to go back to each chapter and review it, just so this treasure can get more exposure.

Loved it.

This is good, but you get nowhere posting all the 17 chapters at once. You should repost this - posting the chapters one by one, with enough time between, will definitely get more attention. I hope you do. :)

Love it!

i dont understand; you have 17 chapters and not a single reviewer how? i know a lot of crappy stories has at least 5 or 10 but this is good?