Reviews for A Kiss in Ba Sing Se: Secrets and Promises
PickNick95 chapter 20 . 5/13
Stopping here because these back and forth Aang is doing is starting to piss me off. Read chapter titles ahead and looks like it's this way the whole story. I normally dont flame but come one already. We're going to have a love triangle parabola possibly and I personally cant waist anymore time ready the same premise ever chapter with a slight twist in dialogue. Going to just have Aang lie and dance around the issur with words the whole 89 chapters, come on. Have a good one nonetheless.
Guest chapter 1 . 3/18
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Guest chapter 89 . 3/18
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SailorCC chapter 89 . 2/25
Damn that was either some top notch acting or Katara is really that naive and heavily in denial, either way as much as i love them Aang and Toph ain’t shit smh. At this point I don’t get why they don’t just admit the truth if this is tearing them apart so much?
SailorCC chapter 1 . 1/3
Are u still updating ur stories? I can’t tell if comfy is done or not
kirinrin chapter 1 . 8/30/2019
Nice
Xilore chapter 19 . 7/29/2019
I have much further to go, but I needed to speak up about what I've read so far.
Aside from the pacing, which feels a bit slow, but as long as it is consistent then it's fine, I want to bring up the characters themselves and how you are writing them.
Toph: Nicely done! We've only barely touched on what Toph might be like in a romantic relationship canonically, but I think you have her down well.
Katara: Again, nicely done. We have seen aspects of her jealousy before and ai think you more or less have her personality down.
Mai: Not hard to say you make this work well also. I spy a trend on that and I can easily see Mai doing all I've read so far.
Aang: Here is where the deviation begins. You've still written him well. His Air Nomad culture can make me believe most of what you have written about him, so most of what I might say would be nitpicking what I don't like without proof it shouldn't be that way. Jury is still out.
Sokka: Unless that bathroom scene was someone's fantasy and didn't actually happen, no. Sokka is many things, but loyalty is one of his defining characteristics. He wasn't in love with Suki until book two when they reunited, and has always been loyal to the girl he is with. For the sake of drama and an interesting twist it would be good for that kind of scene, but this isn't just exploring what a character might do in a given situation, this is completely disregarding a character's core. It'd be like making Aang turn out to have actually hated all benders and once he knew he could take bending away from others making it his life goal to do so. Interesting, but too far ooc to be seriously entertained.
All in all, you write the girls better than you write the boys. I've seen other writers do the opposite. In the end though, it is YOUR story, not mine. Feel free to ignore me, it's all good. Keep doing what you like, and if my criticism helps, great! If as I continue you have legitimate reasons for writing them this way, even better.
Akudi chapter 87 . 7/27/2019
Man, Katara will literally rationalize them if she caught them actively having sex, SOMEHOW! She's bloody delusional, she is... And now apparently everyone BUT Aang and Toph have had sex with Sokka in the crew. -_- He's just too manly. I would say I'm glad everything's finally out in the open, but I feel like everyone's going to meander around actually acting on these revealed feelings. Or do nothing and continue on with their failed relationships. It's a toss.
Heartless demon wolf chapter 86 . 6/19/2019
Aang and Toph I completely understand everything else is getting a bit confusing through, not going to lie. Still impressive though.
Heartless demon wolf chapter 85 . 3/19/2019
Damn, I understand keeping the illusion but what the fuck Aang? Break it off with Karata and get with the woman you're already fucking. This is getting way to long with what should have been quick and painless. Sorry my friend, just a bad day and annoyed. Beautiful chapter and very in character just...What the fuck.
Heartless demon wolf chapter 84 . 2/19/2019
Wow, captain is fucking weird. But very nice and in character heart to heart with Aang and Zuko. Great chapter
crapshak50 chapter 83 . 1/30/2019
All I can say to Zuko is, "that's rough buddy."
Heartless demon wolf chapter 83 . 1/28/2019
Fuck. This is getting good lol. Amazing job.
TheOriginalOn3 chapter 60 . 1/11/2019
Ok I might have to take a break from this xD I'm getting sucked into this craziness and I'm loving it but I don't wanna read it all in one go through so I'ma take it slower now and maybe go back and actually giv some honest reviews of the story so far
TheOriginalOn3 chapter 59 . 1/11/2019
Alright ... I'm a little rocked by this roller coaster of awesome but my good god WHAT IS HAPPENING TO MAH BABIES XD
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