I liked it so much. Thank you.

After all that time ash is still 15? Crap timeline

I think the beginning part of this chapter is missing.

So Ash has been training five years and only a few of his Pokemon have evolved... no thanks

Genial v

Story is good, formatting is trash.

Ahh, what a beautiful ending (even if it was predictable)! Now for my review. Punctuation is extremely important. They may look like a couple of squiggly lines, but they convey the desired meaning. You also misspelled a couple of pokemon and city names so I suggest you to use something like Bulbapedia or Serebii to double check (it's blaziken) . This is more of a personal preference but always write with the text to the left. I find centered text highly annoying. The final thing I will point out is that your characters are very stoic. Add some emotions at the end of the dialogue by saying 'cheerfully', 'excitedlyetc. Otherwise, I thoroughly enjoyed the story. On a lighter note, did you notice that almost always, May initiates the kiss?

I am not liking May's mom so far.

Sounds like something I'd do.

Yay charmander

May's mom is thick

best pokemon story i ever read. i love the drama the romance and the battles. you did an awesome job writing this story i cant wait till you get the next one out

I almost cried, this chapter really touched my heart. The flashbacks really tied it all together though, you are really good at bringing out some of my emotions that I don't really show. Thanks for that.

I was waiting for that! Thank you for getting that in there! The waiting was just killing me, I can't wait to read the rest of the story.

I love the reaction you gave Norman, I thought it was priceless! And again with the small details, you had some really good ones in this chapter. Felix warning Ash about how he could have gotten hurt, Ashes "strange" connection to Felix, Norman's reaction, and the best one (in my opinion) was the one about how Ash felt a bit alone without May in the bed with him. Great touch!