please continue this

Please continue this story and update soon.

Totally love this!

HarryHermione Please!

O.O more please!

Was Lily familiar to the Arch-Mage?

A good start, I look forward to more.

Awesome story so far, i can't wait to read the next chapter! :)

you kinda butchered your own story before it even began. for instance, you have savos talk as if he is talking to people from many holds, this is not true. first of all you yourself said that it was mages of the college and citizens of winterhold. so there was no reason for him to say he would send them to all of "their" holds as the only ones there were winterhold citizens, second citizens of the other holds rarely if ever went to holds as far away and useless as dawnstar and winterhold in the game. second you showed in your questions in the preface that you have only a rudimentary plan for what will happen in your story, while it is nice to be flexible i have seen many with your style before, you write competently for a bit and then something in your head will go "omg it would be awesome if i did this really improbable thing that i totally think is badass" and you end up ruining your story with some terribly cliche or improbably plot device that just will not work.

Can serana be the love interest I think it would mess with the wizarding world if the BWL had a vampire girlfriend

sooooo good, can harry have good eye sight and be tall? also no chapters if him as a baby, maybe at 17? also can he be a master of every magic, except of illusion and a good sword dude?

Not bad

Great chapter Update soon

Hmmm, Seems like a good start. Keep it up !

Looks interesting. Certainly fun. For romance, how about a Hermione that somehow (accidental magic or ethereal shout gone wrong) appeared with the grey-beards.

Ahhh, you might want to go back and fix the canon name typo. If you didn't even spell the main villain's name correctly, things really don't look good for the rest of the story. Let your work sit for day before going back to check for stupid errors like this. Don't just slam some words on a page and think it's a masterpiece. Even Pollock took time with his art and he was a master at slamming paint on canvas.

As for asking your readers to write the plot for you? This is not a group exercise. It makes a reader wonder if you really want to write at all and whether the writer knows what he/she is doing. If you want someone to bounce ideas off of, then look for a good beta reader. This site has a list if you're interested. No war was won by committee and no decent fic is ever written if you let popular opinion direct it. You need to have a vision (and an outline) that you need to decide on and then write out. Maybe not every minor detail needs to be ironed out but the major events are necessary as is an idea of where/when you want to end the story.

You might also want to tone down the anti-magic stuff with the Nords. They don't like magic but they do want the benefits of it. They are distrusting but practical- not slavering at the mouth.

BTW, why does Harry have to be Dragonborn? Way too much bling on what is looking like to be a Super!Harry character. Tone it down, keep him believable and give him hard limits. We don't need all that getting away with itself and turning into a MartyStu!Harry. Writing is all about creating conflicts and problems for your character to navigate. Readers want to ask themselves 'what is he going to do now?' and 'how is he going to get out of that one?'. Give your character super powers and it becomes very boring when your character crashes past the 999th plot point without even breaking a sweat.

This is a good base idea and you don't write badly. You just need some organization and to focus on what *you* want to happen. A little discipline to keep the silly errors from popping up and to not get too carried away with power is good too. You have talent but now the question is whether you can put this concrit to use?