Do a spin off where Ben was captured by some horny anodites and the harem starts a crusade to get him back

Chapter 28 in a nutshell. “OHANA BITCH”

You know for someone not bashing Kevin it kiiiiiiiiind of seems like you are.

You need a spell checker. Most of the words misspelled are the common words.

NANI?!

I hope you have a werewolf female chapter.

Put her in the harem Vreedle, Isosceles Right Triangle Vreedle

A harem is not a group of people entering into a relationship, that's called a polygamous relationship. A harem is when 1 person has multiple consensual lovers. Sure its possible for some of the people to like each other but that doesn't mean every single one of the harem is into each other, friends sure but not into each other as the main person.

Whampire and Kickinhawk are useful

So ben really don't mind being cheated huh

It's really awkward to se romance of 10 y old girls

Really, rape ?

Wow this chapter is really forced

I like your story how it is now and are planning on a sequel?

Ok, first and foremost, as a writer I prefer when people review my stories that they be brutally honest and not dance around the issue, so I take that approach as well for reviews I do. So here goes, you have a good story here, but your many spelling errors and random 'two/four/ten hours ago' make it almost unreadable and make you break the flow of the story to try and figure out what you meant. Fortunately, it is a simple problem to fix, just do a proofread or get someone to beta your stories. While I was only able to get through chapter 14, I am looking forward to continuing after some fixes.

Sincerely,

Hardlight_Artemis