I just have to say thank you. you know how to use the character info correctly, and while it is not a big problem with stories in this fandom, others seem to struggle with something that is not very challenging.

I like the development of the characters but the story line was really choppy and confused me.

lily is a boss

THATS RIGHT LUCY FUCK THEM BOYS FUCK THEM HATERS LOL GREAT STORY.

The characters also seem very OC..

This doesn't really make sense at all. I mean, how can Makarov not allow Sting's being at the guild and then just say "okay" so easily? And another thing, Sting is Sabertooth's master. How can he come to Fairy Tail often? Even if this takes place before that, wouldn't Jiemma kick him out just for going to their rival guild? Also, punctuation. This has an okay plot, but I feel like it carries no emotion and some sentences don't make sense to me. Adjectives might make this better too. Not trying to hate, but please edit this because I'm sure you can do a lot better. Good luck on your stories.

Bunny rabbits!

THAT'S RIGHT LILY PREACH HE FUCKIN MOST OF THE GIRLS IN MAGNOLIA but he done many her hanging around other guys THE FULL THEY DO THAT AT !

Nah, it was awesome, thanks so much for the story :D

Aww now that is cute Sting Jr. I loved it :)

... far too ooc. not to mention all the swear words and languedge. its just not right to start of a story though i commend your effort

Oh that was a cruel tease...

Oh my god wats gonna happen next!

What the hell

Oh godneas