Love it continue soon

I don't understand why this story has so few reviews and favorites. There's so much potential here! The wounds are realistic and the action scene in the first chapter was certainly eye-catching...*snickers* sorry. I got both nervous and excited when Danny lost his vision, in all honestly. I don't know if I'm relieved or disappointed he might recover. I don't handle angst well but at the same time Blind!Danny in a Pitch Pearl setting would be so fun. Sad...interesting...gees...

My only suggestion is to keep an eye on your characters. I always found the advice that whatever emotional state your character starts with at the beginning of a scene is their base emotion for that scene helpful. Their emotions can be altered, of course, it just takes a little more effort to make a sad character happy for instance. It helps make your characters feel more stable.

Anyway, yeah, I don't know where everyone else is, but I'm certainly intrigued. Congrats on getting this far, good luck with everything :)

This is cute!

I wonder how Danny is going to react when he wakes up and see Phantom.

Sam's response to this situation seems strange to me... Just cause Phantom is split from Danny doesn't mean he isn't still Danny in the eyes of a normal person. She was still friends with 'hero' Danny when they were split before. I'm not saying her reaction is bad, but it would be nice to have a bit more explanation as to why she reacts that way.

Aside from that, fantastic job! I love what you've written and I'd love to see more! I could be a bit biased though since I have a thing for injured Danny and protective Phantom. X3

Oh jeez, why doesn't this story have more reviews!? It's amazing! I'm a total sucker for protective!Phantom and honestly the way he started interacting with Sam and Tucker at the end was REALLY intriguing as it was a little unsettling. Also...bonus points for the realism to Fenton's injuries. Seriously, I admire any writer who keeps the wounds and injuries realistic while not invisible or completely over the top. I can't wait to read more!

this seems really good so far :)
and on a futer note: Y U NO UPDATE!
that is all XP

Loving this so much, please continue! :D