Actually, It's a blue resonance gate in archer's pass. But nice story!

So wait are you re-writing the entire story? I liked the way that the chapters before this one were.

Good story, I never understood why they had to kill Dust I mean there was so much potential for a sequel and they gave him so much backstory and took so much time to make him awesome and identifiable as almost like us and they just put him to the axe, no sense whatsoever.

The grammar isn't that great. :3

This is a pretty good start to a Dust: AET fan-fic!

A couple serious things to address, is the sentence structure. When a new character begins to speak, it starts a new paragraph. For instance, When Ginger says "Have you got the documents?!" Fale's sentence should then start on a new paragraph.

Capitalization is another important one. That also applies to the start of a new paragraph.

Also, when a new paragraph begins (With a new subject) you should also hit enter, this breaks up the story and makes it easier to read.

Other than these minor discrepancies, it is a very good start! Keep it up!

Fantastic wiring, you just sucked me right in. Everyone is in character and I really appreciate that.

I'd just be sure to divide up the paragraphs and dialogues better. The first couple chapters have everything smooshed together and it's a bit hard to read. Remember punctuation and capital letters. I think each character would get their own paragraph in dialogues.

Dust talking.

Haley talking,

Etc.

I know not a lot of people read Dust fanfics but this is really good! Keep it up! :D