Quite nice... Loki getting caught in one of his own snares. Perfect

Continue the story please

I'd love the read more of this. I like how the physical wasn't enough for him.

This is fantastic, I love it! Would you ever consider continuing this story?

This is awesome. It ridiculous. And it's them and it's exactly how I see them. Neither wants to give in completely and surrender there most valuable commodity- their hearts.

aawww poor Loki, he can never be satisfied even after all that has happened :( Still love this story :)

*clears throat*

*fans self*

*tries to regulate breath*

daaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaamn that was good!

Dang.

I love Loki when he acts on impulse, thinking nothing matters, and finds that he is totally wrong.

This is awesome.

Incredibly beautiful. The lust and angst are in perfect combination here. I love a lustful, angsty Loki.

Lots of typos but very very sexy. Like oh my god that was hot.

This would be awesome with an ending. Showing him loving her.

Well ! What a lovely hidden treasure this was...I would love a second chapter...x

Thank you for the story. It is well appreciated in the Lokane fandom. You brave soul. I enjoy your stories a lot! Not much errors and diverse vocabulary. However, there is one mistake that I catch repeatedly throughout your writing that always throws me off.
You only use the word 'To' and never ' Too'.

Too
adverb
1. to a higher degree than is desirable, permissible, or possible; excessively.
"he was driving too fast" "too much wine" "too shocked" "not too hard"
informal very.
"you're too kind"
2. in addition; also.
"is he coming too?"

It's a simple mistake that I sometimes make, and I fail to catch the error in my own stories... I always end up googling words or phrases to make sure it's correct.
Please continue with your writing of Lokane and I will continue enjoying your work.
The way to improve is with practice.

Damn! That was amazing. Definitely didn't want it to end there. Umm, could you write more...pretty please?! I don't want it to be over :-(

It's one of the best lokane one-shots i have ever read! this story is just begging to be continue! I'm looking foward to your other story and maybe even for sequel, c: