it could be such a good story, but it's kind of choppy. a lot of the conversations, sentences too sometimes, and scenes feel incomplete. it's just not very cohesive.

there is a lot of confusion over who is talking when after you introduce the new Lucy, Wendy , and Charla. I have no idea which is Wendy and which is Lucy.

Hoping to see more!

I would suggest making the song text different from the regular text so that if somebody doesn't want to read the whole song they can easily skip back to the story.

four people pairings is fuCking crazy

I love your story, don't listen to him. He has no life considering all he does is post shitty spam comments on every story he doesn't like but doesn't have the guts to write his own the way he wants it. You're a great writer with good ideas, don't let anyone stop you. PM if you need anything.

Ok don’t listen to the person who happens to be trolling you, ok? Just keep writing and ignore the hate, you are doing fine

Quit writing you talentless hack, you've been writing this piece of garbage for 4 years and you don't even have over 100 reviews. Know why? Because nobody wants to read the same cliched, nonsensical piece of trash story that bashes their favorite characters by making them act and turns Lucy into a woobie mary-sue so your fu-cking ass can live vicariously through her because you're such a loser in real life. You. Suck. Get over it.

Complete garbage, Natsu and Lisanna would not act like this and have never been anything but good friends to Lucy. You know who hasn't Bixslow and Laxus. Who turned her to stone, threatened to and actually tried to kill her. Guess your dumb shallow fangirl mind forgot that huh

Complete garbage, Natsu and Lisanna would not act like this and have never been anything but good friends to Lucy. You know who hasnt? Bixslow and Laxus. Who turned her to stone, threatened to and actually tried to kill her. Guess your dumb shallow fangirl mind forgot that huh

Complete garbage, Natsu and Lisanna would not act like this and have never been anything but good friends to Lucy. You know who hasn't? Bixslow and Laxus. Who turned her to stone, threatened to and actually tried to kill her Guess your dumb shallow fangirl mind forgot that, huh

Complete garbage, Natsu and Lisanna would not act like this and have never been anything but good friends to Lucy. You know who hasn't? Bixslow and Laxus. Who turned her to stone, threatened to and actually tried to kill her. Guess your dumb shallow fangirl mind forgot that huh

Complete garbage Natsu and Lisanna would not act like this and have never been anything but good friends to Lucy. You know who hasnt? Bixslow and Laxus. Who turned her to stone threatened to and actually tried to kill her. Guess your dumb shallow fangirl mind forgot that, huh?

Complete garbage, Natsu and Lisanna would not act like this and have never been anything but good friends to Lucy. You know who hasnt? Bixslow and Laxus. Who turned her to stone, threatened to and actually tried to kill her. Guess your dumb shallow fangirl mind forgot that, huh?

Complete garbage, Natsu and Lisanna would not act like this and have never been anything but good friends to Lucy. You know who hasn't? Bixslow and Laxus. Who turned her to stone threatened to and actually tried to kill her. Guess your dumb shallow fangirl mind forgot that, huh