I really liked the development, bro, I’m going to say I really liked this shirou, like it really acts a lot like a shirou heaven’s fells, but I’m going to say I found it very OP that of excalibur, but I think it makes sense because the remainder doesn’t have the influence of gaia and acher is another level of projection unlike Shirou, but like the problem is GARmy, like shirou will have to come up with a way to control the Arm because if he doesn't he will die, like I love it because it leaves a consequence to not be Shirou solves everything, like Midoriya of boko no hero when he uses his quirky, it has a consequence for power, Acher could help you by the arm to master your powers, I liked the story and it has potential, but seriously DON'T play with our hearts if you are not going to write at least warn ...

I love this, I hope you return to writing this because this is great.

Please update

Wonderful! Can't wait to see what's next!

And no continuation? Really rude, i really want to see more

And another one bites the dust.

Oi it's been like a year. Ultimate fucking blue balls.

Продолжай в том-же духе писать это произведение!

To put it in perspective, the entire book, The Great Gatsby, had around the same number of words as you do, and you spent it all on a single, rather insignificant scene up the overall plot. If you treat the rest of your story as such, I'd say it'd take 2 million words to finish; worth 20 full novels in words.

The pacing is horrible. You dragged this on for three chapters too long, caught in the wildfire of your character's emotion, and focused to greatly on action. Remember that the simplest things also have their own beauty.

Please continue this! This is really good.

Alot of fate and rwby crossover seem to focus on jaune. I assume this is because of a misinterpretation that he has a singleminded goal of being a hero, but he wants to be a warrior like his family not just a hero. If anything ruby is the character who is entirely singleminded in being a hero of justice in the first few volumes. Though most stories centered around jaune are an oc who is godlike with just the same name.

please continue this!

Jesus this is one hell of a mess i can't wrap my head around. There are so many changes and so much madness that my head is threatening to pop because of it. So keep up the good work.

Hey! You!

Yeah, YOU!

Here is your review, you review whore you. LOL

And a follow just to be sure.

All jokes aside, this is a really well written story. Lush and detailed I can see almost everything playing out in my mind like watching a movie. Bravo, well done! The *only* thing I could gripe about, and its something that you see with virtually all of the Heaven's Feel (and it's many fan-made variations) is the whole Sakura obsession that dominates Shirou's mindset. I mean, I get it... tossed away a dream, an ideal, for the girl... but since he's never actually had the opportunity to follow that dream to begin with... eh, it loses a lot of impact with me. Personally. Thats just me though.

However, that isn't a knock on the story-telling you're setting up though, not at all. Just the base concept I think really limits the possibilities of the story. With the UBWs Shirou he is attached to Rin, but its more tenuous, fleeting... it opens up a lot of options for Shirou in the story-telling department when he's flung far into another world where the rules are different. I feel its the same with Fate route Shirou - just because one chases endlessly and one waits eternally doesn't mean that Shirou can't experience his (new? depends on the context of the story, reincarnation, etc) life and still explore other options. I'd think good ol' Saber wouldn't be too mad with him once he finally makes it to her.

But, I am not averse to anything that isn't the OTP, but honestly everything that isn't the OTP is secondary. Like sprinkles a hot fluffy doughnut. Pretty to look at, might add a little bit of texture and some flavor... but ultimately is secondary. However, that isn't to say I'm looking down on sprinkles, not in the least bit. A plain doughnut can get pretty boring, and its the sprinkles that help accentuate the cakey-goodness that is the doughnut. All in all, one really shouldn't exist without the other.

And I say that to say that I hope that Shirou doesn't push aside all of the other available heroines just for Sakura. I mean... I know she's his motivation for getting back home... but...still. LOL

Anyways, I hope you enjoy this review as much as I enjoyed your story! :D