Reviews for Family Reunited |
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The J.A.M. a.k.a. Numbuh i chapter 9 . 7/30/2019 This seems familiar... :D :D :D |
Kryten chapter 9 . 7/30/2019 New speaker, new paragraph. It’s not just a good idea, it’s the law... of English grammar. |
Kryten chapter 5 . 6/16/2019 You really, really need to work on your formatting. If it’s not random breaks in the middle of sentences, it’s huge blocks of text with no breaks. |
The J.A.M. a.k.a. Numbuh i chapter 1 . 2/23/2019 Hey there you really should get yourself an editor mainly because your formatting and punctuation is a bit off and you really need to add pauses and line breaks in order for the story to flow more smoothly otherwise the reader can get a bit frustrated because there are no moments for him/her to stop and properly digest what he/she has just read so you know I hope you understand what I'm saying? Seriously, though, you have a very good premise, just run it through an editor first. Also, check out MY take on the Jungle Movie, "Dream of the Lost Summer", here on FFN. |
Peachy-Author chapter 1 . 2/23/2019 I loved "The Jungle Movie"! I was so happy that Arnold got the reunion he'd longed for! I wonder what else is gonna happen in this story. |