Reviews for An Unbroken Will & Still-Beating Heart Keep me Going
Perseus12 chapter 2 . 6/10
Hehehehahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahaha~! Serves them right for following that Old Goat Albus' ridiculous Greater Good! At least Nicole showed some mercy to her former family for second chance, but to her tormentors are bad on her black list. I wonder if Queen Elizabeth II would offer Nicole a knighthood for saving United Kingdom from Voldemort's blasphemous crusade and offer her in the position on the Royal Court as Royal Witch Advisor? I'll wait to read the next chapter.
Guest10 chapter 1 . 6/10
As much as I like your wbwl stories, but most of them are incomplete, you seem to have some great ideas but often leave them on hiatus after 3 or 4 chapters.
Nicholas chapter 2 . 6/8
Dollars to donuts says that molly won't learn her lesson anytime soon.
Green-Silver-Ravenclaw chapter 2 . 6/7
the rant on molly was on point for this
Skull Flame chapter 2 . 6/5
- That's true, and only because rocks can't feel. Although I don't think Molly has the restraint to keep that in secret. I'm surprised that you took that analogy so well, I don't have the best experiences with that.
- That's a funnily accurate description for Percy.
- The twins' potential is accurate. They had a succesful business in canon. I'm kinda surprised that Nicole had that opinion about them, though.
- Ron won't be charming as long as you're writing the story, and I'm fine with him being the proverbial butt-monkey.
- I get what you mean. It's like a close-minded SJW trying to be a scientist. The best Hermione can do is go to another country and start anew, and all could go well if she doesn't fall into old vices.
- I see that I underestimated Ginny's fangirl tendencies. That's the worst kind of punishment for Theo. I can think of a number of ways he can end up, given the situation he's in, but I wonder which will be the case in the end. Also, Ginny can get his babies no problem, but the luxury? Theo doesn't have a single penny to his name. Unless Ginny collects the proverbial bounty on his head after getting pregnant... That sounds unlikely, now that I think about it.
- Being merciful with the Potters sans Theo was something curious. I wonder how they'll do.
- Sirius is on the way to rock bottom, huh?
- I didn't remember that Amelia Bones was Nicole's godmother.
- So now there's no wand in Ollivander's that can handle Nicole's power... That's curious.
- I loved the verbal dressing down she gave to Molly.
- Her relationship with Cedric is a sweet detail.
3697014 chapter 2 . 6/4
Woah! Been a while since you last updated this story. My feelings on this chapter are mixed, what changed your usual M.O? The Idiot's got off light why is that? all they got was a talking down to. Call me a psychopath but I wanted them to suffer more. So is this the last we will see of the Idiots and The Sheep nations of Magical Britain or will there be more of them? ( preferably suffering)

The funny thing about Me is, I usually don't like Bashing stories EXCEPT for Harry Potter ones. Weird XD

Also, Sakura Lisel has a point any Muggleborn that manage to keep their IQ from falling into negative digits could make bank. They just need to take their time and be careful to not draw suspicion, maybe enlist the help of a family member or really close friend to get back all the money that was stolen from them by Magical Britain for a worthless education and then some more for all the years of BS they have to put up with. But the bucktooth bint won't be figuring that out, Smartest Witch my ass, she just has high reading retention and just copy-paste what she reads nothing more.
SapphireAsashi chapter 2 . 6/4
That...was more subpar of what I thought would happen...
Greer123 chapter 2 . 6/4
I love all the punishments that were handed out in this chapter. Also thank you for answering my question about Magical Britain going bankrupt.
FateLancer17 chapter 2 . 6/4
I'll be honest with you, this is a great chapter. I'm just surprised she didn't kill them in the process especially Theodore. And I really thought the interactions between her and her former family and the Order of Fried Chicken would come in maybe Chapter 3 or 4 but I'm not complaining.

I'm just wondering what is going to happen next in this story, I mean, I feel like it won't be the last time we see of these traitors in the story. I mean, Remus wasn't there so I probably can predict that he will make at least one appearance later on.

But overall, great work. Thanks for the 10K word chapter, gives me more to enjoy.
Pravus666 chapter 2 . 6/4
This was a pretty good chapter.

Also, that Omnipresent Will bit reminded me of when Luffy used Conqueror's Haki in One Piece, dope. For some reason I get Silvers Raliegh vibes from her idk why.

Also nice to see Nicole just telling everyone to permanently pass piss off considering that after everything she went through. And still coming out the otherside without their help as a relatively sane human being as far as we know without their help they all can go suck it.

One thing I do wonder is what does Nicole do for a living? Because I'm actually curious to what she does to support herself and her kid(s).

Other than that can't wait to see what her journey is gonna continue to be

This was a 9/10 chapter
the stargate time traveller chapter 2 . 6/4
Aside from one or two mistakes - I thought Nicole had left before Theodore's fourth year so how could she have met Fleur, and the use of the name Ivy - I enjoyed this chapter, but I was surprised when I found out Amelia Bones was Nicole's godmother since it had never come up and there was no hint of her in the previous instalments.

The punishments... I felt the Weasleys could have gotten a bit more, especially Molly and Ron, and Theo could have done with a bit just to show how out of league he is. I hope Hermione follows the advice, although I dunno.
Sakura Lisel chapter 1 . 6/3
Though... Depending on how much money she makes as a prostitute while being paid I'm Wizarding money, for the 'smartest witch in her generation' she's really stupid when it comes to muggle money. Or how much the Wizarding money is worth in the muggle world if she found somebody who would buy her prostitute earnings from her hopefully without the buyer asking questions about where she got gold, silver and bronze coins AND won't call the police on her.

If she cashed in whatever Wizarding money she earned in the muggle world, she probably could make herself a small fortune quickly not only to pay back her parents, but maybe even get herself a place in the muggle world so she can escape from the life she's forced to now live in the Wizarding world because of all the bad decisions she made as a kid
geetac chapter 2 . 6/3
She was screwed over by nearly everyone except for a few. They deserved what's happening to them.
aelaryn chapter 2 . 6/3
Got an email notification about this chapter and had no idea and oh boy. Love it. Revenge fics are always super satisfying.
Eclectica737 chapter 2 . 6/3
I'm guessing that little Theo is going to be Ginny's for a long time, to have & to hold. It seems that the Potter's are no longer Potter's anymore. I liked how Nicole took tore into the fickle bastards.
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