This is good writing here. Delightful diction. Well thought language. And the story is sweet. Keep up the good work.

Heh, the tone and the mood is just right. For this is what the WHOLE of the series is about. Thanks a lot to the writer!

Wow, for two hours, this is really something. It's well-written and I don't see any flaws within this piece. You nailed everything: the plot, backstory, dialogue, and resolve. Excellent work ;)

-Ann

This is an older fic, but you did excellent, keeping them IC. Also, your writing reflects your high level of skill. Good job. :)

spelt clare wrong. anyway, dont feel bad i do the same things with Naruto ff. good job.

Eveything looks fine on the technical front. I had no trouble following the narrative. As for the story itself I liked it. Nothing that violates canon, and the charecters felt in charecter. It was WAFF, but I like WAFF. Good work

pretty good, for a two-hour run. better than many stories i've seen that must have taken a lot longer.

Don't worry about the handcakes. It's just food. This was really good.

Nice to see more Clare and Raki. I never thought about how Clare would react to sweets.

Entertaining and rather much like I would expect the characters to act.

You should write when they meet again story.

After the 7 years, clare is in pieta and raki is train by Isley

the one of the abyssal. priscilla seems to like raki?

And may make him have youma or awekend .(I think thats going

to happen,since he has been with isley and priscilla.

not too bad realy.

only thing i noticed was that her name wasent Clare until Tressa named her

Nice fic, definitely had a good writing style.

Hm, you pretty much killed the whole plot with Teresa, but it's stll a sweet shot.

Nice.

Very, VERY nicely done. And don't worry about the handcake thing. Plenty of cultures have devised similar confections. It would fit in with the tech-level anyway, though how they got chocolate is another matter entirely, heh.