Hi,

Nicely written. I love when people write about April with Roger when it's preRENT! Good job!

Yours,

Toni

It's a bit too insubstatial. I mean, Roger used to be a junkie. It's how he got AIDS. The play makes that pretty clear. And odds are on if Roger was a junkie April was too. It's not realisitic to think that April and Roger got AIDS from something as stupid as that. It isn't consistant with the theme of the play or the characters themselves.

You got Roger's emoness, and his and Mark's ralationship good, even if the diolouge was a bit cheesy.

Okay. A couple of things right of the bat.

1. Heroin was usually Roger and April's drug of choice. That involves injection with a needle. They have to inject the needle before they feel the high. So a junkie, like April, would not cry because she had been pricked with an empty needle. It wouldn't happen, because she would be used to it.

2. If enough air enters your vein (such as with an empty syringe) an embolus of air can form in the blood which can be fatal.

Once again, I would've liked to see more structure, and especially in this case, a little more research. It was fragmented, and a little too choppy. You would do well to delve into more detail.

absolutley wonderful! U captured roger and marks characters very well!

Interesting take on how Roger and April contracted AIDS. One thing to work on might be punctuation... you're missing quite a few periods and at least one question mark. Other than that, good job! :-)

COOL in never thought of that

This was good. Mark's always there with words of wisdom

Aww, poor Roger and his emo-ness. I don't think he's an asshole. Good story!

It seems good, but since I have no idea what "Rent" is I don't know how to follow it. But good none the less.

i liked this story. it's pretty good :)

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I agree it was a mistake, but he can't beat himself up over it. April wouldn't hhave wanted it that way. He needs to quit feeling sorry for himself. Great job!

Awesome story!

I've only seen Rent like 1 time so i dont really know all the characters but it was very well-written.

it's okay Laurie, but you know me I have the high standards for fanfiction stories.

Great job! I love your writing style and this idea! Write more RENT oneshots soon! :)

Uh...April dies? That was a very risky plan Roger took. Very risky indeed. Really emotional and very good.