The story is not bad. The characters are a bit ooc. First Setsuna never curses, I know part of that is do to the show itself but generally it doesn't fit his character type it makes him a bit childish. Also his to lock on putting his finger in his mouth was a bit tame, Setsuna more likely would have quickly pulled was and glared, but the awkward silence was spot was good, felt was a bit too bold, even in the later season she was more open but still quite shy so the way you had her confront Setsuna was a bit weird.

I love how you ended that! My only issue is with the basic grammer stuff, but nothing with the story. Nice job on your fic! w

Ooohhh, drama! I love it!

Aww, cute! I like the character progression you added and the little liberties that you used.

Not bad, not bad. Still a little random with your romantic scenes, a little build-up would be much appreciated. Also, when you have jumps in time that are more than a few minutes, telling the audience with a little (X hours) or (X days) later would be great for something like this.

Whoa! Where did THAT come from?

it was funny sad and nerve racking allat the same time way to go

I do blieve this is one of my most favorite parts of the stroy

"That was the most awkward 47 minutes and 26 seconds of my life!" Setsuna :D

I don't know what it is, but it's just cute to me. Along with when Fledt is helping him about his fever and Lockon.

Awesome story .

This is your first fic and here is my first review. _

Up till now the plot hasn't been clear enough to me, so I'm looking forward to your next chapter.

Just one thing: Setsuna to me is a quiet boy pressed by the hatred toward wars, and thus I was a little bit surprised when reading about his "f**k" all of a sudden.

This is just my personal idea.顽张れ！

AW!

I CAN'T BELIEVE IT'S OVER!

It was really nice and cute altogether, great job!

All right, that was a very cute of Setsuna. Although, you can avoid OOCness of the characters even they are in a lovey-dovey situation. I spotted few grammatical errors and again, you misspelled Tieria's name. Like it though.

~zephirus

Keep up the good work please update soon

no! Lockon and Setsuna can't have second thoughts! their so cute 2gether, it would make me sad if they break up but so far, ur doing a very good job! :] hope u continue wit this story!

NOO! Se-chan and Lockon...Lyle...are doubting each other! Damn it what did you do Superevil? - Nah, I'm kidding! Can't wait for the next chap.

Oh yeah have fun sailing and going to Quebec! Be safe!

wow great story and great chapter. I feel sorry for the lover birds having to be parteded. anyways keep up the great work