Omgomgomgomgomg that's such a good fanfiction!

Now THIS is how the 10th episode should've been.

Oh, this was just fantastic. Beautifully done, just beautiful. The thing I enjoyed the most about it where the quotes you used from the anime. The whole thing was just magnificent, but those really stole my attention, because if you know where those quotes all come from, then you know all of the feelings and situations arising from those quotes, and that makes the whole thing so much more meaningful.

Another thing I loved (because really, what isn't there to love about this?) is that even in the midst of the dreams Ciel is having he keeps trying to convince himself that they aren't true, which has got to be difficult, seeing as they're so vivd, and because of that he keeps doubting himself too. I mean, I know he's forgotten everything, but even when Claude was brainwashing him he kept doubting what Claude said right up until the end. So it would make complete sense that his subconscious mind is having dreams of events that are real, instead of all the fake memories Ciel now has.

And then the ending. I knew it was going to be Claude. I knew it. I didn't want it to be, but alas, I was right. (I really don't like him) The fact that it was Claude made it perfect though, and I especially liked the fact that the only way to really tell that is the last line he says there.

Okay! So all in all, utterly fantastic, and with much thought put into it too! Now I must favorite this and then read it again...

I think there was one point in the story where you used the word 'worst' instead of worse...Yup, there it is. 'He screamed and screamed and screamed, but no one came for him, no one saved him and the pain just got worst' - Right there.

For the most part the spelling, grammar, and punctuation was well done. I do like how you quoted actual moments in the anime where Sebastian and Ciel's bond was focused upon. The bits you added yourself were pretty good, too. I like Ciel's musings as to how he never felt he could truly be what Elizabeth wanted because he couldn't be honest with her. It was a nice touch. Also, all through the fiction there was that underlying feel of dread coming from Ciel, even in his dreams. All the while he was trying to convince himself that all of the things he had felt were only dreams. It felt like he didn't want the world he thought he knew to shatter, but he /did/ know that it wasn't right. That it wasn't his life.

However, I don't think that Claude should have responded to Ciel's screaming Sebastian's name. It implies that Ciel thinks the Claude is Sebastian, where in the episode he very clearly thinks he learns that Sebastian is the one who ruined his life. That is what it felt like was implied by Claude coming to his aid at his screaming. I think it would have been better if you had found a way to bring Claude into the room while reacting to his "master's" nightmare in a way that made it show that Claude was not what Ciel had thought he was/was dreaming about. If any of that made any sense.

((And I feel like I am the only person who doesn't completely hate Claude for what he has done so far out of the people that have reviewed your story. . Sure, I do not appreciate what he did, but he is a good "villian". If I were to be upset about anything pertaining to Claude, it wouldn't be that he took Ciel but that he got rid of Alois. ))

That was amaizing! If there were any mistakes I didn't notice because I was in trance XD I really hate Claude after episode 9..I hope Sebastian makes his death VERY painful XD Great job.

It would be most amazing if this was what happened in the anime. Incredible work!

Beautiful, absolutely beautiful. I saw nothing wrong with it, nothing at all.

how did i know that was Claude...there was no way in hell that was Sebastian... No Spelling Errors as far as i can see keep up your writing

Holy jizznit! This was amazing! I loved how you had flashbacks from the actual anime and then threw in some "extra" stuff as well. It really balanced it all out; plus, I really liked how you had Ciel thinking it was all a dream and it wasn't real. You really showed just how messed up Ciel's mind must be thanks to Claude (agh! I hate him soo much for taking Ciel away from Sebastian... T_T).

All in all, a great story! It was definitely worth reading! _

J-C