Please come back and finish.

Don't worry about it!

No problem. Happy New Year!

so wonderful

plese update soon

many errors here again.

Washington DS - Washington D.C

The story's good but it jumps too much. Describe the scene around them, write the emotions down, and also don't be afraid to explore.

Space out your paragraphs a bit. it looks a bit clumped. :)

there are many mistakes here. Typos, spelling, etc. be careful! use spell check and grammar check from microsoft word if you have it.

Also, what is this "Later that night Rory goes to sleep thinking about Rory."? (I left the period there because it's part of your sentence in the fic) Is this Rory thinking about logan? watch your contractions (won't, shouldn't, etc) as well as Homonym (words that sound that same but have different meanings and spellings. ( Like your and you're)

is this a crossover from one tree hill? Brooke and Lucas seem like the characters from OTH.

your doing good on this story so far can't wait till the next update to see what else happens in this story

For Rory Gets Shot you could probably wrap it up in a chapter or so. Either her moving in with Logan and having baby or fast forward to the wedding. Unless you have a new twist planned. I like to think of them having a happy ending! :)

This chapter was a bit disappointing because I was looking forward to the dinner with the grandparents because on the show they're always the funniest thing or most dramatic. Not really either of that in this chapter. Didn't understand why Honor and her husband would be there. It's not as if Logan told them to come because they had a special announcement. No real since of Gilmore family that the show is known for. I liked Emily making Christopher leave.

Not sure why you keeping mentioning a lounge in reference to a house. Lounges are in hotels or hospitals.

WHen Rory moved her ring I thought she was going to chicken out. Was she but Logan told anyway?

I could totally see Emily and Richard buying a house in San Fransico so they can be near Rory and baby whenever the want! :)

I really liked this chapter. You did a good job picking up on the subtlies that make Stars Hollow so special! Nice to see Logan and Rory finally together. My only complaint is the MANY, MANY error in writing and grammar. Remember, Rory and Logan are Ivy League educated and they're northerners. Therefore, they will have flawless grammar. I don't have an Ivy League education and I still cringed. You always say He and I got engaged. Never start me as a subject of a sentence. That's just one example.

Okay, someone Rory just met (Brooke) would visit her in the hospital, flying cross country, but not her very wealthy grandparents who adore her? Realism?

I find it odd that Logan's friends would show up at the hospital and not one of them would call Logan?

Please Write More.~!