Okay many things wrong with this chapter... The usual grammar/spelling, not too disgusted about that but. At least warn the readers in an author's note or in the summary that it's a crack AU. I was expecting this to be one of those deep Ciel character studies and I got this depressing shit. (not saying that your story is shit, the idea bothers me but very creative... I guess, just that all the depressing stuff is shit. Fuck you depression.) Anyways!

Because authors always ask for honest opinions, but they mostly don't get them bc this site is filled with annoying ten year olds who make an account without their parents permission and are clearly not thirteen. They make crappy stories about them as ocs with the hottest characters in the fandom falling in love with them and a happy ever after regardless of the actual story of the fandom. Anyways, my honest opinion is that I personally didn't like the first chapter. Your first mistake was that you didn't warn the reader that this had nothing to do with the original storyline. Your second mistake is that you obviously didn't look over your work enough otherwise you would've fixed those grammar/spelling errors.

But despite all of that, I'll give the other chapters a chance. So expect to see me again :D

I will warn you that I am very blunt, almost to the point of being borderline rude, in some people's minds. If you're open minded, then I'm not that rude. I give constructive criticism, so don't mistake them as flames _.

PEACE.

what a twist at the end!great job!

ciel needs some happiness!glad you are back!

Yay Grell's chainsaw

what a twist!i certainly didn't see this coming!(where was everyone for 100 yerars?)

poor ciel!

poor ciel never knew who his real emeny was

Oh geez, didn't see that one coming. Poor guys!

now what is makong cil's life so much fun NOT!

no one ever said ciel was stupid-& always elegant

ciel is so apathic at times(which is good here)

Um, near the end of this chapter it says that Sebastian is 194 degrees and that is illogical, seeing as he is human, and I believe you were aiming for 104 degrees instead
Great story so far and I'm sorry anyone pointed that out earlier.

happy birthday!poor ciel!he just can't win!

ciel should go see a dr. about that blood!thu i am sure some days he does want it all to end

this story is stuningly amazing and I can't wait to read more