Sorry if I didn't understand part of your review due to the lack of punctuation, but I'm aware this fic has rough spots. I believe I'm getting better with every volume I publish and when I finish the series, I'll try to revise this old work, also Disconnection(again!) and Fall.

However, if I did read right, you're using text-to-speech software to read my works. I wouldn't recommend it, since I play a lot with words and formatting, especially in the parts that involves witches.

if you are trying to translate this story from another language you failed it's barely understandable you have send text Aires spelling Aires outright mispronouncing stuff find someone that is fluent in English and let them right over this story make sure they keep the heart of the story but correct all your screw-ups I made it to chapter 2 and I can't go on because the sheer Badness of the English is so bad I'm afraid I'll get a migraine from listening to it with a text-to-speech engine and forget trying to read it please from what I can tell this story has the potential to be really good get someone to help you with your English and correct what you've done wrong cuz this is a bad job on translation you need someone that is fluent in both languages good luck and I hope the rewrite come soon because this seems to be a good story.

"And try to pretend your english isn't good" sais Homura who showed advance knowledge of calculus in the chapter one of the anime. (Seriouly, WTF was that in the anime? The only explanation for them being studying that is being gifted childrens in a special school.)

Did Homura need to be a bitch with that girl? What was the point? Prove that she was right? What a lack of empathy. Besides, people can change if given the time (Mami and Kyoko did it), but she was not given such time.

Anyway, it's beem a great fanfic and I don't understand why it isn't more popular. It's a real shame because you wrote something awesome. I can ensure you that lack of popularity isn't because a lack of cuality. I enjoyed every single minute I spent reading this fic. Great work!

Nice chapter. It was nice to see Mami discovering she was a witch and how all the characters reacted to their pasts events, specially Mami and Homura who knew better than anyone how bad Mami could react. However thx to all the support it looks like it didn't affect her that bad. BTW only Mami and Madoka would have reacted in the way Mami reacted when she remembered her past, instead on focusing in her horrible death she focused in what she did to Charlotte in other time lines.

I also liked to see Kyoko reminding Homura with a punch that she doesn't know better than everyone else. Not that I dislike Homura, but it's nice to see Kyoko being... herself I guess.

And ofcourse I think that both Kyoko and Mami were too soft with Oriko and Kirika but I guess it couldn't be helped and that there was no point in taking it further. Vengance wouldn't have given anything back and it looked like Oriko knew very well what she had done.

It's sad to think that after their first encounter Homura killed Oriko and Kirika before they even knew what was going on. Funny fact, it was meaningless because Oriko visions are right and she doesn't always see Madoka becoming a witch, other times she sees Walpurgisnacht. However I must admit that Oriko's methods weren't exactly good ones since for her the end justifies the means no matter how many innocents must die to achieve her goals and in this fanfic this "dark side" of Oriko is shown again.

Anyway, great chapter. Now only the Epilogue and the extra.

Nice chapter. It actually was Kyoko's witch after all.

It't been really nice to see Sayaka fighting Kirika. And it looks that no one is brave enough to break Mami's heart... I specially loved to see Mami back with Bebe/Nagisa/Charlotte, I love their interaction and that Mother and daughter kind of relationship that they seem to share.

No one seems to believe in Oriko but she can see the future so she should be right or at least even if she doesn't know what has to be done she knows what can't be done. So for now I'll side with Oriko because I think she should be right.

Haha! The good old Rosso fantasma. I was surprised for her to be able to do that however everything made sense when it was revealed that they weren't Kyoko's illusions but Mami's replicas.

I was going to sleep but after Kyoko watching that horse and knowing how her witch for is and how things are going I can't help but think that Kyoko might have become a witch and now I must continue reading to at least be out of doubts.

Well played... well played...

So... I know you provably hate comparations but I guess it can't be helped. This is your Ch.10 of PMMM but with alternate possible futures instead of alternate pasts.

Interesting. It was a litttle confusing at firs but I guess that was the point, wasn't it?

It was cool to see how you implemented Kyoko's past and her conversation with Mami about the death of her parents in the AU with demons.

So... Kirika is going to do what she is best at... Can't wait to see what happens next.

I must say that find almost insulting how few reviews this fic has.

While I was sad when I thought that Yuma actually died it also made me "happy" because PMMM is not exactly a happy story and death is in each corner. I'm glad that she didn't die, but... It's hard to explain, I just hope that you understand what I'm trying to explain.

There is a reason why people don't describe what happens when someone dies and the body stops controling the various body sphincters, the results are disgusting (and no one likes to see his/her favourite character in that situation). However is remarcable what you did by writting about it despite being a writting taboo (for good reasons, disgusting reasons). So I feel that despite finding it gross and unnecessary I'll applaud you and give you the credit you deserve. (At least Oriko's father is not an important character that someone could care for to feel offended.)

So Kyoko being paranoid was actually right, it was a trap.

This is being interesting. I wonder what Oriko has in mind.

It's nice to see Kyoko and Mami together. I love when they interact with each other and their relationship when it works fine.

And it's nice to see Kirika and Oriko in the world after Madoka's wish.

You did a great job with Kyoko caring about Yuma. I have read Oriko magica and I perfectly understand why you did what you did and I loved it. Great job.

Cool. Wonderful.

Wonderful fourteen chapters.

This doesn't have reviews how?

Anyway, looks like a nice continuation to Disconnection. Always nice to see Oriko and Co, seems like people forget about them most of the time.