Chris x Ashley is my favorite Until Dawn pairing. This is a very dramatic setting, and you did manage to help me believe this was Ashley we're dealing with. :)

I honestly don't get the hate for Ashley. I mean, it's kinda your fault that she lets Chris die, anyway... -_-

But overall, really good. I only noticed one or two grammar mistakes, so good job.

9/10. :)

You wrote this beautifully. I hate that so many people hate Ashley for begging for him to shoot her, and then refusing to let him inside, killing him, even though she asked him to kill her. I genuinely think the people who hate her for that don't realize how in the world she could have been feeling, and I truly think they don't have the right to judge unless they have ever faced that exact situation, because they don't know the irrationality, they don't know the FEAR. It really does infuriate me.
And I think your story did her character justice, especially at that moment. It doesn't shame her, nor does it make Chris shame her. It really does show that everything is indeed out of fear. I think you wrote this brilliantly and that more people need to read this, especially Ashley haters.

This is so good - and I really like the way you've written it? Idk its not your usual style but its gorgeous, kudos :) xx

His was a really interesting way to look at those characters. That part of the game can either be my favorite or least favorite part, depending on the choices made. You took the choice that led to my least favorite part and made it interesting and compelling. I enjoy d reading the thoughts that the characters have while they're going off to their deaths (whether it was really their actual death or not) and making them sympathetic. It is obvious you put a lot of work into this story and that work shows! I loved reading it!