Reviews for Saiyan Chronicles: The Chosen Child |
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![]() ![]() ![]() It's a sweet chapter |
![]() ![]() This time you updated soon which is great. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Woah nice filler. Kudos |
![]() ![]() ![]() Wonderful excellent chapter and like how the party went and even Jaune brought vodka. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Awesome chapter and really excited for The Golden fairy rewrite thought. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Will jaune learn how to fly like in DBZ or continue using One Piece technique Geppou |
![]() ![]() ![]() excellent work on this chapter and yeah this was a good relaxation chapter |
![]() ![]() ![]() KO awesome chapter, glad that Jaune return to Beacon and shred his first kiss with Ruby which was very sweet though wish he didn’t have to stop a gang war when he just got back, but he got to do what he has to do to keep the peace. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Alcoholic Huntsman and Huntresses? Arrow would be proud! |
![]() ![]() ![]() I missed this |
![]() ![]() ![]() Man fuck that manipulative bastard Ozpin, Jaune should have took Shiro advice and not trust Ozpin. Why do everyone always trust him |
![]() ![]() ![]() Some grammar issues that I found... There are occasions where you misplace "you're" and "your". "You're" is a contraction for "You are", like "You're beautiful" or "You're amazing." "Your" is a word that is used to describe the ownership of something, like "your sword" or "your shield". Many authors get these two wrong, so don't worry. Just try to keep watch for these two words and how you use them. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I like the idea... But I don't see how it could work out... Because goku at his weakest would still be able stomp rwby universe with little to no effort I mean by the time frieza is revived he is able to hang while in his Base form while Frieza in his final form... No way this works unless you nerf goku into oblivion. |
![]() ![]() It was just the beginning of this month, that i found this story(i get distracted a-lot) ANYWAY, the first problem i have with this story, is that Jaune Arc, is becoming a gary-stu! Getting "all" the women, getting power enough to do whatever he wants, but "saying" he "won't" actually use it. It began generally good story, as of this chapter, its lost the original it had, whatever it was. I believe this began with, an average jaune arc, aquiring the soul and power od Dragonballs' Son goku, with Mastered-ultra-instinct. It was generally favorable, but as soon as you added other story element's, like tokyo ghouls' kaneki "transformation", giving jaune split personality disorder, and a whole lot of other stuff, too numerous to add here. Outside of bad grammar, the ONE thing that drove the nail home, was that jaune arc, was a "chosen one" I had believed it COULD at least NOT be a gary-stu, as multiple "chosen one" stories, end up being like that, However, it appears i was wrong. I must say goodbye & good luck, for this story to me, at least, is no longer worth my viewership. |
![]() ![]() Please add Winter to the harem |