OH MA GOD I LOVE THİS

*tears* Poor Edward, but good job on the fic! *favs*

As I said in the companion piece, very nice. Beautiful characterization, the plot is simple but makes complete sense, and the writing style is very nice.

Loved the way Ed is slipping away here. Just getting worse and worse, more and more machinelike. It's sad when he doesn't even respond to the short jokes anymore...tsk.

I have to agree with your profile that there are precious few fics exploring the brotherly or (even better) paternal relationship Mustang has with Ed. It's sad, because he's so good at acting like a /subtle/ father-figure...allowing the boys to do what they want, while making sure they don't get in over their heads. He's a very good psuedo-father, so it's almost sick how many people favor the blatant Ed/Roy romantic relationship. Blech. So, thank you for approaching this from the paternal aspect, and writing it /well/ to boot.

Good job. Also going on my faves-must put the companions together afterall.

~Velkyn Karma

absolutely beautiful

.. WELL. xD;

You know, this was really good. I can't think of any other way to say it ~

The way you destroyed Edward like that without doing a thing to him, it was amazing .. to see how far he could still fall, and how Roy is breaking him the same way Roy himself was broken.

Damn. It's just REALLY good, k

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Love the natural angst of warfics.

Apart from that, yes... emotions conveyed very nicely. Language flowing, too. I wish it were longer :) Feels a bit rushed since it was a one-shot - then again, i guess it's inevitable if so many events happen in a short span of... well... fic-space.

Liked the emotions :)

Thank you. It's fics like these that keep me sane when i read all the other crappy stories.

I liked it a lot. It's so well-written I really wish it were longer.

I can't stand Roy/Ed yaoi (so OOC!), but I love all fics that portray them in a non-romantic relationship, be it mentor-pupil, father-son, friends or brothers. I think you portrayed the two very well in your story. Ed doesn't enjoy his superior's company, but he doesn't dislike it, either. And Mustang genuinely cares about the boy. The way fate plays tricks on both of them makes me feel quite sad.

Good job. Thanks for sharing. :]

Well, I actually wasn't looking for this story at all in the first place-but I was looking for military angst mostly having to do with Mustang and either Hawkeye or Ed. So I decided I'd take a look.

Needless to say, I'm glad I did. I loved the premise of the fic to pieces-to be perfectly honest, that's definitely what everyone would think/do.

And it was sad... I always thought that Mustang would have liked to keep ed shielded from all that forever-there have been so many other times he's neglected to inform Ed of something because he knew it would crush him. Despite all the bravado, you're right. He never wanted to be the bringer of bad news to Edward.

I think though, insane snarky bitch that I am (it comes from living too long in the Inuyasha fandom...) that the random Japanese terms could be left out.

nii-san: this could be considered acceptable, but it really does seem out of place to me.

taisa: You've been interchanging colonel and taisa freely, so I think it would be better to stick to one or the other.

hagane: see above.

iie: Ed can just say 'no.' He's more likely to speak in English than Japanese when the story is written in English.

Point being, Japanese vocabulary is better left for stories written in Japanese. Especially for Fullmetal Alchemist, since the world it takes place in is not Japan, and is not modeled significantly after Japan. I think it would be good to instead put your very refined English vocabulary (which is, by the way, quite a nice change, compared to some of the fics offered here) to use.

Kalliel

perfect

Wow! That was great! I often think that sympathy is Edo's Achillis' heels, and that seemed very logical that things would turn out the way it is. (according to your story)P

Hello!

Most excellent fic! Nice characterization and interesting story! I was wondering, do you have any plans to develop this idea? You know, making it a long fic? I think you'd do great and I have actually been looking for a good Ed goes to war fic for a long time.. So.. Write a ficcie like this with several chapters and I shall bake you Swedish cookies! Or something similar!

Excellent story! This is one of the best FMA fanfics I have ever read! -

one-shot? if not i would really like to see this continued. It's great!