it isn't finised

It's freakshow

mmmmm what happen? nooooo this the 2rd incompleted story cmon

wow

what a twist he need to play around sam too knocked her up and then marry her two wives ooooo

Love it
Needs more D.E.T.A.I.L.

love it! keep going!

That was kinda fucked up

I wont sugar coat it this was very poor. No character development, emotions were none existent and in general it was far to short to even be considered an intro.

Have you ever lost a child be it miscarriage or whilst they are alive. If not then you should realize that the way the two dealt with it was idiotic. A mother who loses a child in a miscarriage can suffer years of trauma and pain. Losing a child leaves a hole in a family that never goes away. The fact that it was our child is dead oh well. NO there would be grieving crying sobbing Danny would kill Valeria not calmly talk to her. If anyone hurt my little girl I would use there spine to strangle them. Even when pregnant my girlfriend and I felt instant affection and love for our unborn child.

Please try and use common sense and research before attempting to make a fic.

You gain points for the parring and idea though so well done

ok, good story, but if ur gonna do a cop out and send us to a differnt story instead of writing "after they explained it to his parents" or something similar, MAKE SURE THEY CAN RUN TOGETHER. the section u send us to is a COMPLEATLY differnt set up. u dont even have the same pairings at that point in the story. ember was with SAM for crying out loud. nothing wrong with that but i would have liked to see how his parents whould react with THIS setup if u were gonna send us else were. also val was present for that but u made her unaware of the situation in this story and even had her make ember lose the baby. once agian im just annoyied at being sent some where that dosent coinside with present setup.

aw! so cute! i wish you would write more... please?

I loved it! youll close the story right here? or are you planning on giving out another sequel? o.o?

this was certnality sad

HEY,IT'S SO SAD.I CAN'T BELIEVE WHAT VALERY DID ,SHE IS SO NOT COOL. I MEEN KILLING AN UNBORN GHOST , REMENBER WHAT DANNY AND EMBER SAID,THEY CAN HAVE ANOTHER WHEN THERE READY.

ANYWAY COOL CHAPTER.

WHEN ARE YOU GOING TO PUT UP THE NEXT CHAPTER.

PLEASE,HURRY