| Reviews for If I Weren't a Shinobi |
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   appletree98 chapter 1 . 12/29/2010 That was so sweet. I loved it. Good Job. |
| hinode1704 chapter 1 . 9/7/2009 that was sweet and sad |
| jadedsiren chapter 1 . 8/27/2008 This is so good. I love the bitter sweet romance and the emotions. You wrote it beautifully. I would like to see a happy ending oh and I got this from darkuchihademon's favorite story list. If you ever get the chance check out her Tears of An Angel story: Neji/Tenten. I loved it! |
| Arthuria chapter 1 . 11/13/2007 I liked this piece. I liked how you portraited them and how the weight of their own struggles and ambitions pulls them away from other things in life. And how they are capable to facing it. You had a good pace for the development. I can accept most things, if it comes with an explanation, and this comes from a long serie of thoughts and considering. Such as how you considered that they wouldn't go any further then kissing, since they both knew they would regret it. That is viewing a character with care, not many writers do that (I don't think I'm perfect on that myself), in a wish to get out what they want all to soon, without really building up for the event. So to give a summary. Good points. Pacing. Character mentallity and correct behaviour. Development. Bad points. Lack of enviroment description. Lack of dialogue at some places. (However that might not be a bad thing considering the type of characters they are I'm just trying to view with a critical eye.) Hope that went without any spelling mistakes and give a motivating push. |
| SMILED chapter 1 . 11/10/2007 love the side comment about how anbu is secound to the hardest job in konah training naruto is the first |
| DewWater chapter 1 . 7/30/2007 That was sweet... |
| Mary chapter 1 . 7/28/2007 This was incredibly cute, and if you write a follow-up, I will DEFINITLY read it! (And you are not a perv at all)) |
| rain-of-the-soul chapter 1 . 7/25/2007 out of all the stories ive ever read, this one is probably the only one i can trully see comming out in the actual plot...maby the sercumstanses a bit diff. but nothing to drastic of a change. I really do like it. Hope to see kmore of your stories out there. If there anything like this, than youll defenetly have my review. |
| Xanie chapter 1 . 7/16/2007 Aww. . . No citrus? Kakashi-chan would be disappointed. . . 'Course there is already enough citrus in Icha Icha Paradise and Make-Out Tactics that he doesn't need it anymore. . . Anyway. . . Wow angsty romance! You rock, do you know that? Ja ne! -Xanie XD |
| framed-high chapter 1 . 7/14/2007 ugh...angsty romance...i lovE it...but i'll love it more if they would end up together...hahah...nice one.._ |
| Purplewolfstar35 chapter 1 . 7/13/2007 Aw...so sweet...but so sad. *Tearing up* I loved it. I FEEL SO BAD FOR THEM! |
| Dreaming101 chapter 1 . 7/13/2007 *gasp*... I LOVED it! I would love if you continued this! ~Dreaming101 |
| Mischievious Lil Tink chapter 1 . 7/12/2007 I loved it! NejiTen ROX! |
| piixiiestiix chapter 1 . 7/12/2007 Aw Sweet but Sad |
| ForgottenLovedOne chapter 1 . 7/12/2007 that was very good and sad! |
