I liked that. It was a little short and there were a few grammar and editing problems. But, otherwise, it was okay and I liked it. (You used the name Silver, though. I don't know if I like that.)

that was really good. most people with original characters make their storys completly stupid and pointless. cant wait for next chapter

this chap was really good and I didnt login cause I didnt wanta backtrack to get to it and stuff soooo here I am and its a really great chapter! I love it please continue it praty please cant wait you write more and thanks for all yur reviews k

WRITE MORE!

that was interesting. i can't wait to find out what happens in the next chapter! keep it going.

Kinda very short, but it's got me curious. When's the next chapter coming?

It's a good start. Could have been a little longer to start. I like the beginning

though.