Love your story! But I quite don't like the girl who joined them... Anyway. I love it and it means that you should update fast or I'll kill you by sending you tones of messages about late updates and how life is not fair(just joking)

PS: I KNOW I'm repeating myself but... I LOVE IT!

-mkay, "stupider" isn't a word...more stupid, how 'bout?

-"Who said blackmail had bad effects?" :)

-"Since I finally got….oh just never mind!" ooooohhh...will this be elaborated on?

-"'Who said blackmail doesn't end well was an idiot', what a load of crap. Oh, how I hate karma…"

change to: "Whoever said 'blackmail doesn't end well' was absolutely right. What a load of crap. Oh, how I hate karma..."

I think that's what you're trying to say...

-"Not once did it occur to me that this could be a trap, a danger, a way to control." ummm...control what?

-luv the prophecy at the end, sounds almost out of PJO :D

again, kinda all over the place, but definitely action-packed and entertaining. update!

UPDATE!

-"Puff pants? Puff pants?" Epic :)

-"The two baboons stared at me, each mouth open with unsaid insults." great line!

luv the part when she wakes up hugo. not only is it funny, but it also shows a bit of rosie's character. awesome.

the part about the sight was rushed...maybe rosie could elaborate on the a bit more?

this chappie didn't flow so well as the others, but rosie's characterization more than made up for it. great job!

-good opening!

-"be-pinked" nice...

-"Merlin's pants, Scorpy!" BEST. LINE. EVAR.

-a llama in a tux? oh, the image... XD

-snigger and snicker don't fit into the same paragraph...

-"I'm going in, are you coming or not?"

change to: "I'm going in. (- period) Are you coming or not?"

-after scorpius wakes up, you don't need to repeat all that happened in the dialouge (too boring). Try something like this:

We quickly filled Scorpius in, and his eyes got wider and wider. When we finished, he stood shakily, jaw slack.

"I don't remember anything after the door...and my hands," he grimaced.

-why does electrocution make sense to rosie? has she ever seen anyone electrocuted? or maybe been so herself? or is it just a guess?

anyway, very exciting chapter with a good flow and solid ending leaving everyone (especially me!) wanting more. now, on to ch. 4...(hey, that rhymed!)

Ack, it blocked my ch. 1 review for some reason, so i'll put it here.

Ch. 1: Nice intro for the characters, love the way Rosie's family was portrayed. Question: Are we ever going to hear more about Scorpius's mother? Since Rosie expressed an interest in her...

Ch. 2: "That's the most cliche line I've ever heard, even if it is coming from a hat."

EPIC LINE XD

The part about Scorpius's sorting was rushed, but it was a good, solid chapter. Great :)

How can one tease "heatedly?"

Gotcha.

awesome update! loved the dream and her past.

I really like this! Please update soon, and keep up the good work :)

your story is really great! you should definitely keep writing! do you think youre going to post one chapter a day? hopefully more than that!

still cute ;) but can't wait for more to happen.

very cute so far!