I like this side of Neji. It's quite sweet of him to worry. :) Then again, at 15, he's no longer as emotionally stunted as when he was 13. :) Gotta thank Naruto for literally knocking some sense into him. Lovely story.

AWWW to cute!

This was incredibly awesome! Perfect detail and characterization, I just loved this! Great job, I can see all of it! Very, very cute. I liked this side of Neji. Write more!

Aww! lol. Really cute ending!

Awww! Adorable!

awww i think this is sooo cute...well done :)

AWESOME

and im the 1st 2 review

YAY!

i loved it :):)

Review time!

Okay, so I like your story, quite a bit in fact. Normally I leave freaking long critiques, but you don't need one!

Your grammar is great, as are your spelling and mechanics. Spelling is oddly underrated on here, even though it's a writer's site. So good job there!

The only problem with mechanics I found is that in the fight scene, you switched tenses, to present tense. I understand why you did that- it usually makes the action feel closer, more personal- but you had too much trouble pulling it of. It was rather awkward, and didn't quite flow. You might have been better off leaving it in perfect or past-perfect tense.

At the beginning, you did info-dump a little. It wasn't too bad, but maybe you could work on the intro a bit more. Work the info in more creatively, don't just state facts. For an info-dump though, this was really not bad at all. Barely worth mentioning (yet... I still did. Oh well)

Also, Neji was just a hint OOC at the end. *sigh* but it's SO HARD to write an in-character Neji, right? Yours was pretty good, though. At least after Shippuden episode 14 (no idea where that was in the manga), its almost possible to picture him acting that way. Maybe he could have been a little more distant, a little more confident... that's all.

All in all, great job! I really had fun reading this, it was cute, and touching!

-Mira