I'd say it could be better but my account is literally for just troll fics so I can't say anything.

I'm crying a bit

Work on this fic. I don't mean to mean, but honestly, I have to be truthful. Look, it's pretty good idea- but for one thing, Squee wouldn't sing while he ties a noose. And it wouldn't be a hard rock song like that, you should have written more and chosen a softer song. This song might as well have been more of a way to show off the song than the actual story.

It takes a while to die from being hung- and Johnny isn't stupid enough to take, like, five minutes to figure out Squee is tying a noose. He would probably figure it out right away, I think the whole hanging it from the wall, putting around the neck, would give it away. And Nny wouldn't skulk around, he's boisterous when it comes to Squee, he'd barge in right away after peeking to see what's going on.

This fic is emotionless. Sure, it has a lot of potential, but fix it up. You should explain if Nny was close to Squee, If his death meant anything- a single tear could mean anything. Was he jealous that Squee could die? Was he sad because they'd been friends? Explain more.

Please don't think I'm hating- just work on the fic.

This song. Really? This was different in nicest terms i can think of.

Awwww D:

I'm not gonna cry, I'm not gonna cry... I'M NOT GONNA CRY! eh, I'm crying anyways, I congratulate you on making such an amazing fic

You have no idea how incredibly sad I am now. Good fic but extremly sad

Short but very good. I am just imagining this scene in my head escpecially when Squee's leg twitches... Keep The Epicness Up.

this story made me love this song _

That was...horrible!TT_TT I WILL NOT CRY DAMNIT! *the tears come anyway*

Imma go sob my heart out now...TT_TT

XD

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Shadow

Aww so sad! Poor Squee! Of all the things Nny has endured and how 'unfeeling' he is I bet Squee's death is the only thing that could possibly make him cry. Great Story BTW! So sad...but cool at the same time! C:

that's so sad! (but BTW i'm pretty sure it takes a little longer than that to choke to death.)