I know you wrote this story a long time ago, but thanks anyways. It was good.

That was fan-freaking-tastic. I enjoyed this so much. God! I felt so many emotions reading this. Amazing job author, simply amazing. I hope you write these characters again. Thank you for sharing this.

holy shit xD

(I have pledged to review all the Dredd fics, and give a review a day in 2015 - so here is review #84!)

Hey, just a thank you from you - and thank you for writing! It was a fun story to read - a few rough points and some issues that could be revised, but fun nevertheless!

(I have pledged to review all the Dredd fics, and give a review a day in 2015 - so here is review #83!)

Another great chapter - really, your best so far. I love the emotions, the descriptions, the look inside Anderson's head and then, by extension, inside Dredd's. Just a really lovely chapter, well written.

(I have pledged to review all the Dredd fics, and give a review a day in 2015 - so here is review #82!)

Another great chapter - cool action, and some really nice emotion in the beginning. The first half is the better one, I think - some really nice word choices here. The second half gets a little rushed and has too many very short sentences that need to flow into each other more, I think. I kind of get the impression you have scenes you really want to write - scenes where the connection between Dredd and Anderson manifest - and that they get rushed rather than having the longer attention they need.

But, this was a great chapter and I enjoyed reading it. You have a great style of writing and nice imagination for scenes in a story.

(I have pledged to review all the Dredd fics, and give a review a day in 2015 - so here is review #81!)

This is SUCH a better chapter! Really, it's like night and day! This is great - I love the opening, the imagery you get in their thoughts, the way you have physical exertion acting as a remembrance of their intimacy. The paragraphs are longer, the number of misused words much less, the structure better and easier to follow, much more description that draws you in.

Really, this is just a great chapter and I enjoyed it - I wonder; did the sex scene get written in a hurried rush because you were trying to get it finished, and this was a more considered piece? It almost seems like you hurried to get that scene written and you hadn't thought it through.

This chapter really shows what you are capable of writing, and I enjoyed it very much.

(I have pledged to review all the Dredd fics, and give a review a day in 2015 - so here is review #80!)

I think this chapter is where the journalistic, direct style begins to show its weaknesses - you have a LOT of sentence fragments, short sentences, and very short paragraphs. It's like a disconnected series of images, rather than a narrative. I think you know what you mean; you can see the scene clearly in your head, but it's just not conveyed to the reader. It seems disjointed and rushed. And, as before, there are many misused words which need to be corrected.

Also, it doesn't sound like Dredd and Anderson - they could be Alice and Bob here; it doesn't seem like a story set in Mega City One or about Judges or anything other than two people gradually falling in lust with each other and having sex. And, the sex scene isn't really that titillating or erotic - it's pretty much just "this is a thing that is happening".

I don't mean to be discouraging, but this story doesn't seem to have anywhere it is going - there isn't a plot, really; just scenes of Dredd and Anderson having perfunctory sex presented in a style that is hard to follow.

You've got a GREAT journalistic style - you just need a story to tell with it, rather than simply describing some kind of erotic encounter.

(I have pledged to review all the Dredd fics, and give a review a day in 2015 - so here is review #79!)

I think I would make pretty much exactly the same comments for this chapter as I would the first; the style is direct and journalistic, which I like. But there are too many sentence fragments and too-many misused words and grammatical errors. They really distract from the experience of reading - the piece needs a solid proofread to correct those errors.

Because the story itself is good - the gradual softening of Dredd is a lovely thing (although I think the sexual elements might be a bit much - it doesn't seem realistic he would react quite that much!) and you tell it very well. It's a good story and the direct style is great - but the errors really pull down what is otherwise wonderful to read.

(I have pledged to review all the Dredd fics, and give a review a day in 2015 - so here is review #78!)

You have a very good writing style - direct and almost journalistic. It works well here, I think - there aren't a lot of superfluous elements here, which makes the story tight and quick.

I think the are two main issues with the story as it stands right now; firstly, you have many times when you have used the wrong word - you use a word that exists, but it is not the right word. Usually, it is a word which sounds very close to it - Dredd's "groan area" isn't his "groin area" etc. That is often a function of spell-check coming along and being overzealous. Also, you have (especially near the beginning) capitalized pronouns more often than they should be. Pronouns should only be capitalized when they are at the beginning of a sentence, or when one wishes to show divinity - Jesus Christ gets "He", Joe Dredd not so much!

The other issue shows up further down the chapter - you have a LOT of single-sentence paragraphs which create a disjointed narrative. I think you need to go through and read it, and see if you can't bring the sentences together into larger paragraphs. A paragraph should show a single contained thought, and the break should demarcate a break in the narrative or action - right now, you have too many paragraphs.

But, I like the style and I think you have something rather good here. The somewhat inappropriate conduct of these two next to each other seems out of character, but that is the genre and story so it can pass. But, it might be worth reading through it and considering; would they really behave just like this? Small changes might make this even better.

But I do like this - it is a good read and you have some definite skills.

I enjoyed this immensely thank you for writing it :) The characters were spot on and it was very creative!

Wonderful story.
I'm very glad you went beyond the original 2 chapters.
So much emotion!

I stumbled across this one (on a karl urban kick). Simply wonderful! The way you paint the inner emotions and dredd's inability to show them were so wonderfully done! The image in his mind of her getting hurt! His underlying attraction and difficulty controlling it, him trying to fight it but being helpless against it seeing her pain, it at the same time him trying to comfort her and being a little gentle ( something that seems like grand new territory for him) was amazing!

I feel like I am in the story-feeling what dredd feels when he realized that he has come to actually care for someone!

And the sexy psychic "dream" was HOT! (Glad he stopped it before it went too far-sex should be between two awake and consenting adults...) :-).

I can see that the whole psychic thing ARDS a whole new level of hotness to making love! And she sees little glimpses into his panic when she was hurt, his lust at her body, his protectiveness , and what is probably love underneathe it all!

Hope you keep writing!
:-)

Wonderful. Simple as that.

THIS is your first Dredd fanfic?! It is amazing! I hope you write more (a LOT more). Your descriptions of Dredd's inner thoughts and his actions (as well as Anderson's) give such insight into their characters. I especially like the slow build up as Dredd realizes his feelings (oh so slowly). wow!