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My Stories:

DIVERGENT FANDOM

Dauntless Academy:
This is my first story on here. I was still trying to find my writing niche, so to speak.

Dauntless Academy II
Completed sequel. (Needs to be edited through in time to remove the author notes and various mistakes in grammar and spelling)

Differentiate series:
AU where the Insurgent and Allegiant books never occurred. Plot place two years after the events in the book of Divergent, minus the war that was at the end. I want to say that everything up until the point where Four and Tris kiss after initiation is over, happened. Initiation age has been changed to eighteen years old for this series.

Contrast:
A modern-day AU of Eric and my OC, Ana. Ana is trying to get back on her feet after a horrible break-up. But she notices how similar Eric is to her ex, so she holds herself back. Are they really the same? Or are there any contrasting qualities? Story has been completed.

Restore:
New story that I've been working on with my OC, Ana Summers, and Eric Coulter.
Ana has been a young widow for almost a year. On the anniversary of her husband's death, she and her son return to the memorial where they run into Eric, a man who her son is convinced is his father.

A Brave Man Never Surrenders: (Says placed on hold, but considering deletion)
An alternate universe to Differentiate where JoyAnna Summers (my OC) and Eric Coulter are the same age and met before their choosing ceremony. (possible deletion)

Courage: (UPDATED)
Slightly AU from the books. Happens before Eric's choosing. Eric and my OC are the same age.

Prejudice and Pride:
A twist on the Divergent and Pride and Prejudice novels. I have decided to combine the two together. This is my first attempt at Fourtris.

Reason: (WILL BE DELETING)
There is little known about Myra. We mostly know her as Edward's girlfriend. But what if she was Jeanine Matthew's daughter that no one knew about? This is a Eric/Myra pairing. It should follow the timeline of the Divergent trilogy books but with a slightly different ending then we expected.

Dauntless Relationship Chronicles: (WILL BE DELETING)

A five-part story series. Each part will feature a Dauntless ship (relationship). They are anywhere from 6-8 chapters in each story. I had planned that they would only be 3-5 chapters but the stories ended up being revised to my own liking or having additional scenes added into them at the last moment that they turned out being longer than anticipated. None of these stories are about Four and Tris but they occasionally make cameos in the stories. Each story is from the POV of the main female character (ie. Myra, Ana, Lauren or Christina). Part 5 is the only story that alternates between male and female so as to get a well rounded perspective on not just their relationship but the others also.

(UPCOMING STORIES:)

Criminal Behavior:
I blame this idea on watching too much Law and Order, Criminal Minds and maybe even Leverage.
A possible Summary: JoyAnna Summers (my OC) has been with the Amity Police Department for a while and is hoping to transfer to the Central Intelligence Agency. The kidnapping, rape and murder of two of her childhood friends from Amity sends her to take an undercover assignment in Dauntless.

My Divergent OC's:

A SONG OF FIRE AND ICE FANDOM

Maiden's Mercy:
A story where Lord Eddard Stark brings back two babes to Winterfell. "We are the same," she constantly tells him. Raised as bastards and hidden in the North, this young maiden will help change the game for House Stark.

HARRY POTTER FANDOM

Ownership: (possible deletion)
This is my first attempt at writing a Harry Potter fanfiction. This is a 'dramione' story. Other characters are mentioned throughout the story and I tried to create different pairings than what everyone is used to. This takes places a few years after the Wizarding War. It isn't really told from any character's particular POV.

(UPCOMING STORIES:)

Malfoy Relationship Chronicles:
A three to five part story series. Depending on how well the 'Ownership' story goes, then I will possibly proceed with this.

POSSIBLE FANDOM CREATIONS IN THE WORKS:
TWILIGHT FANDOM

Bond
I may revisit my original idea of a OC/OC. There are may too many Bella stories out there and I didn't thoroughly enjoy her character. The OC I had created for my story is the cousin of Jacob Black. After her mother's death, she returns to La Push with her cousin, Rachel, to live with her grandfather - Joseph Black.

LORD OF THE RINGS/A SONG OF FIRE AND ICE FANDOM

Demon
I'm not entirely sure if I may use the Lord of the Rings characters or if I may make it A Song of Fire and Ice story. It will be about the daughter oF a Lord who weds her to another Lord or King - either Eomer or Robb Stark. There is no love in the beginning but in the end they bond over a horse that is named 'Demon'.

Never be afraid of being different

I’m a cat in a household of dogs.
I’m a toad in a river of frogs.
I’m a hat in a closet of shoes.
I’m a sigh in a room full of noise.
I’m a bat in a jungle of birds.
I’m an earth in a space full of stars.
I’m a line in a sketchbook of swirls.
I’m a plate among jelly jars.
I’m a boy in a family of girls.

Reviews:

"Criticism, like rain, should be gentle enough to nourish a man's growth without destroying his roots."

This is the sample of a destructive review:

Ok I cant take it any more. Even in your summery here...'yes this chapter is much more shorter then I anticipated, but hoping that you all love it.' ok kid. much more- is horrid grammar. I want to rip my hair out when you say things like that! It pulls you right out the story and it ruins it. Try this chapter is much shorter. See simple. Clear. Think Clear when you write. Also when you say but-you don't need a comma. I don't know...there is so much fluff in between the important parts that I found myself skimming everything because it was just not interesting at all. Quality is better then quantity. You have a lot of chapters here but I could not get through half of them because it was information I just did not need to know to further the story. It was confusing also because you would just plop the scene there such as "after blossoms fight" or whatever. Let the writing say where we are and whats going on, don't just give it to us, not interesting that way. You have to flow the chapters so they make sense, that way you won't need that little introduction thing in there, again it takes you out of the story. I also never knew who the heck was speaking. I got frustrated because the POV changed so often without telling me who was speaking! I had to constantly go back and re read, OH, ok, now it's Eric, no wait never mind now its back to Anna. Anyways I don't mean to be harsh but it's a really good plot and story so I was frustrated I couldn't latch onto it with the grammar, POV etc mistakes so often. I'm not usually one who frets about that stuff but it is just too intrusive. It literally changes your life also when you write in present tense. That was the worst mistake you made which I think was mostly at the beginning chapters. It seems better now but keep and eye on that. Ok well good luck!

I would have listened to this review but when I contacted this person, she said that she understood why I got defensive and that she liked my story (did you not read that part?) No honey, there is one line in there that says it's a really good plot and story but immediately after it says that you're frustrated with it. This was a total bash and I was personally affected by it. It made me feel inferior and also made me question everything that I did, even when I was at work or taking classes. I got defensive because it was obvious from this statement that I needed to defend my words, my thoughts, and my person as a writer. You attacked me on that deep of a level and yes perhaps I over reacted and am being too sensitive but this did not help build me up.

I had taken a communication class my first semester in college and I remember the professor stating that the best way to pinpoint something that needs improvement is to let the receiver know where they are already excelling. If you come out straight with the discipline first they might not be as receptive. I had a particular review who sent me it through private messaging to let me know what I was doing right and what she enjoyed about my story. Then she mentioned what 'unnerved' her about my stories. It was easier to take and it was this review or private message that encouraged me to think that 'hm, perhaps I should edit my story'.

I'm not saying that you should falsely flatter me, its just another way to lie. But I would appreciate it if you were selective about how you chose to criticize me. And also the reviews that say 'this story is dog sh--', 'I don't know why you're writing', 'worst OC ever' or 'your story is the reason why men don't respect women' are not helpful either.